You
By Semper Fi Reborn
My mind is like a waterfall,
Of daydreams and mist.
Like a young love,
Experiencing a first kiss.
Although all the lines,
Speak fully with truth.
No words are more lovely,
Than those about YOU.
When you enter a room,
All eyes at your call.
Sort of like a mirage.
Are you not here at all?
Speak now,
Let me hear the sound of your song.
Wake me from this dream,
For I've slept for so long.
O' wait,
Let me sleep, lest you shatter my peace.
Dream of You for eternity,
My heartbeats increase.
I stare,
Like you are a room with a view.
My mural of beauty,
My vision is YOU.
2007-10-10 13:25:40 · 15 answers · asked by Semp-listic! 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
My heart is beating, wow!!! This is so beautiful, a lovely poem, terrific poet you are :-) Can't wait to read more of you!!!
2007-10-11 00:25:42 · answer #1 · answered by . 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
BRAVO Semper FI This is the best poem of all times.All your poetry is so great and they all make me think; and go wow that guy can really write good things...
2007-10-10 14:21:35 · answer #2 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Bravo! I think it flows very nicely, and when reading it the images popped right into my mind. Yes, that sounds odd..sorry =P
Continue to write! This is very good.
2007-10-10 13:37:26 · answer #3 · answered by Sammy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think I like it.... It's not a poem I'd consider a favorite of mine but still...pretty darn good.
2007-10-10 13:28:46 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very sweeet. It makes me want to feel a love like that.
2007-10-10 13:28:08 · answer #5 · answered by frozenfreebird9 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
That was a very pretty poem.
I would be very honored (flattered) If I was your girlfriend.
God Bless You.
2007-10-10 13:34:25 · answer #6 · answered by Brilliant 1forHIM 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
good...dont need to capitalize you. it makes it sound like youre yelling it, sort of.
2007-10-10 13:28:48 · answer #7 · answered by Abira 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
excellent,
give this to your wife (or girlfriend).
also a rose.
I agree with sky
Bravo.
2007-10-10 17:31:13 · answer #8 · answered by robert p 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it sounds like puppy love from some teen or younger w/ good grammer so i guess no
2007-10-10 13:32:51 · answer #9 · answered by ஐKatஐ 3 · 0⤊ 3⤋
very passionate and well written, I liked it alot.
2007-10-10 13:30:02 · answer #10 · answered by tanya c 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋