left for dead
I'm bleeding, I'm bleeding for you,
Breathing the rape that I long ago knew.
I drown in a lake filled with crimson fire,
How deep are the scars in my mind?
I take a walk on a cold Autumn night,
I inhale the stars, and drown in my fright.
Does it really take torturing children,
When armageddon comes, where will you sit?
Swallow the bitter taste, you once deeply craved,
So cry a sad smile as frail as morpheous.
Feed me but it is not worth dying for,
My son he has come, to carry me home.
Look all around, the world is a dream,
I travel to places I have never seen.
Terror above, beautiful as the night,
Black butterflys swim in full flight.
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2007-10-10 09:55:51 · 10 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It gave me good chills, wow!!! This is fantastic work, baby!!! I can feel the loneliness and the cold breeze of autumn at night.
Love you
your angel
2007-10-10 11:12:58 · answer #1 · answered by . 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Another one I needed to know... it is almost as if your poetry has a life and a purpose, which only the powers that be truly know. So to all those shallow people out there, tell us all not to live in the past? Maybe the past is immortal and lives in each of us...
2007-10-10 18:36:44 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is another of your great poems; so sad but so mysterious you really have a great gift with your writings and touch a lot of hearts..Thanks for always sharing...Your friend always Shelly
2007-10-10 18:21:48 · answer #3 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
If your intention leaned toward vaugueness, you did good. I get conflicting messages, then, maybe not, then, maybe. Makes me think very hard, well written, great word flow and rhythm. I really liked 'black butterflies swim'.
2007-10-10 17:06:28 · answer #4 · answered by Dondi 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
A bit emo sounding but it's good.
2007-10-10 19:53:29 · answer #5 · answered by Mary 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow that was amazing. sad, but amazing. It definitly did give me chills.
2007-10-10 17:06:47 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I love your dark poems.
2007-10-11 04:59:24 · answer #7 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow thats really deep. it almost gave me chills. i really like it.
2007-10-10 17:01:28 · answer #8 · answered by llamasrcool67 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
alls i can say is.... wow. thats really deep. You should try to get it published.
2007-10-10 17:07:13 · answer #9 · answered by Tara W 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I don't think you really wrote it.
2007-10-10 17:47:35 · answer #10 · answered by Sali 3 · 1⤊ 3⤋