Proof read job objective please?

Question

I need your assistance in proof reading the following, i appreciate your help.

"I am a competent detail oriented individual, with experiences in fulfilling commands in communications, graphics and marketing projects, looking for a position in the financial sector as a marketing associate with the long term goal of becoming a marketing director."

Answer 1

"I am a competent, detail-oriented individual, with experience fulfilling commands in communications, graphics and marketing projects, looking for a position in the financial sector as a marketing associate with the long term goal of becoming a marketing director."

Answer 2

I am a competent, detailed-oriented individual with experiences in fulfilling commands in communications, graphics, and marketing projects. I seek a position in finance as a marketing associate with goals of becoming a marketing director.

Answer 3

First, "proofread" is one word.

Second, you had quite a few mistakes that a "detail oriented" [sic] person wouldn't make!

Third, the "job objective" is too vague. Any prospective employer would be unimpressed, if not bored, with it.

Fourth, this strikes me as being more of a homework assignment than a job objective (i.e., nobody uses the phrase "fulfilling commands"), so I'm not going to help you any further. Next time, be honest, and put it under "Homework".