This poem is the basis of Christianity. Hope you understand it?

Question

Night of Crucifixion

Rain of sin
Upon
The Jews and heathen.
The ground gives way to
Mushy dirt of wickedness.
Clouds grow sackcloth,
Day turns to night
Thunder rolls over Golgotha
Upon this sight.

I look upon my blood-stained Savior.
Lashed by the centurions; crowned with thorns,
Bearing the cross and mocked by man
Pieced by pikes driven with pain.
Yet the mob was surely entertained.

Beyond is the wooden stature of the cross.
Beholding, splinters on the back of the Holy One.
Pierced, gasping, and feeling
The trickling of blood and onslaught of rain.
Yet He’s gazing and saying,
“Father, forgive them for they know not what they do.”
O! What agony he must be going through!

Upon the knoll, I see,
Many rising and crying.
Rising for air,
Crying for loved ones are near,
Yet no one hears.

Night of salvation,
Death of my Messiah.
The heavenly one,
Who versed against Satan
And won.

Answer 1

Except for your first stanza:

"Rain of sin
Upon
The Jews and heathen..." *

which is totally bogus because neither Jews or heathens put Jesus on the cross, the rest of your poem flows rather well and fairly accurately tells the story.

And your line 'The heavenly one' should read either 'The Heavenly One' or at least 'The heavenly One.' All direct references to Christ are capitalized in His honor.

(*The local heathens had no say whatsoever in Jesus being ordered to be crucified. And as far as blaming the Jews, a handful of rabbis and scripture scholars did have a hand in deciding Jesus' faith on the cross. But a handful is not the whole Jewish race or religion. 99.999999% of the Jewish people living during the time of Christ had nothing to do with His death, did not harbor any hatred against Him and a great many probably didn't even know who Jesus was.

Don't stereotype. And please do not use your faith to spread misconceptions.

Answer 2

'A' class work here poetist, i really was swept up in the story of the poem and i'm not even christian!
But other than the feeling that i've heard it all b4-not that your work is dubbed or anything, but that its a singular event that has been so widely written,illustrated and sung about over the years that it seems almost cliched!
Given that it is one of the most pivotal and poignant points that have vastly influenced christianity so much so that it is now iconic, I still can't help but wish that some other events were as beautifully captured in song or in poem or image!
For example, one of my favourite poems to this day is one by the poet Rupert Brooke and the poem is about how Mary was made pregnant even though she was a virgin through a visitation by Gabriel.
I love it mainly because its rather imaginative, flows wonderfully and again because it isn't so trite.
But all in all,your poem could have been the narrative words for those epic movies that are all the craze these days and that i happen to enjoy watching any number of times!
I didn't quite feel much in the first verse but as i kept reading you redeemed yourself in all the others!!!!!!
You know i'm lovin 'em so keep 'em comin'!!!:-)

Answer 3

John 1 : 1

Answer 4

Atheists have discovered after pursuing Christianity that not hiding in the back of a faith and an historic rfile written after somewhat not what genuine Christianity (or the different cost equipment is approximately). and incredibly understand that "like Jeffrey Dahmer in case you dedicate homicide after which sooner or later somewhat desire to repent and ask God for forgiveness,than specific you're able to be stored" isn't so. human beings set their own ethical compass. people who keep on with a faith do exactly that - keep on with. and those like Dahmer 'locate' faith to excuse there loss of morals. If I take myself as an occasion, did the Christianity course and located it lacking. My ethical compass demands extra of me as somebody. I take own accountability for my strikes and don't declare that a God will forgive me for my strikes. all of us make options approximately how and what we do interior our lifetime. God is a cop out for people who desire an excuse to not be to blame for their strikes.

Answer 5

Replace the word "Mushy" and you've got yourself a fine poem. Might I suggest "Sodden" instead. You are a skilled poet. Market your piece ASAP and good luck.

Answer 6

This is great poetry poetist. I was moved in particular by the second and third stanza .

Answer 7

Take your poem and enter it in the poetry contest at poetry.com
GLuck

Answer 8

I like it!

Answer 9

I like it you did a great job...

Answer 10

Good poem
We are all sinners.