Can someone plz help me with my english paper its due on monday?

Question

heres what i got so far its over money and im writing the bad sides of it.

my outline looks kind of like this
-intro
-change money brings
-problems money brings
-greed money brings
-conclusion

I only got the firs 3 paragraphs done can you guys tell me what you think im not good at grammer which is the main reason i put it up here can a kind sole guide me i will kill my self if i fail



Does The Size of Our Pocket Matter?
Do you want to be a millionaire? A lot of people dream about it every night. Sure it would be great to acquire almost anything you want but, is it really more important than a healthy cheerful family? Many people are unaware of the problem and responsibilities money can bring to a person life. Although money is an important factor of living, one must not give up his or her life, demanding to become wealthy.
In the olden times people used gold and silver as a source of trade which was truly
inconvenient, this in turn brought the concept of money as a way of trade to citizens. Money can
change the way a person looks at things. There are lots of sayings out their explaining that
money is the root of all evil. It is what makes one do awful and regrettable deeds. Money makes
you get away from the things you loved and your proper friends that actually care about you and
not your capital. This wealthy person starts acting, speaking, and even thinking differently. The
concept of money brings an entire new personality to the person.
As if change was not enough for this wealthy man, this person also experiences problems. A common person has the belief that big numbers will resolve all their troubles and will bring them a life of happiness. This might be true to some sense but truth is they just are not happy. In fact, wealthy people are more likely to suffer from depression and stress due to the amount of responsibility money brings. The Millionaires will have to watch their every move because the spotlight will be always on them. The phrase “with great power comes great responsibility” comes into play tremendously with this wealth. In my opinion money should be looked at more as a concept then something you need in order to be succesfull. Successful

Answer 1

It's easier to proof read in person. Find someone to give you some pointers, i.e. grammar, context of some of your words, and spelling and punctuation. If you're going to introduce some history about the "invention" of paper money, present facts, not just that carrying a lump of gold was a nuisance.

Go to your library and look up these things and how to incorporate phrases and quotes made by others. By the way, your use of their in the sentence "There are lots of sayings out their..." is a context issue I mentioned. The words THERE, THEIR AND THEY'RE have different meanings and are not interchangeable.

An example: THERE are some things wrong with your paper. We are going to THEIR house for dinner. THEY'RE (they are) going on vacation.

If you aren't sure of spelling, get a dictionary or choose another word. Good luck.

Answer 2

Does The Size of Our Pocket Matter?

Do you want to be a millionaire? Many people dream about it every night. Sure, it would be great to acquire almost anything you want, but is it really more important than a healthy, cheerful family?

Many people are unaware of the problems and responsibilities money can bring into a person’s life. Although money is an important factor in living, one must not give up his or her values trying to become wealthy.

Long ago, people used gold and silver as a source of trade, which was not always convenient. This in turn brought the concept of money as a way of trade to citizens.

Money can change the way a person looks at things. There are many sayings out there explaining that the love of money is the root of all evil. It is what makes some people do awful and regrettable deeds. Money can cause you to get away from the things you loved and your real friends who actually care about you -and not your capital. Some wealthy people start acting, speaking and even thinking differently. The concept of wealth brings an entirely new personality out in that person.

As if change was not enough for this wealthy man, this person also experiences other problems. Some people have the belief that big numbers will resolve all their troubles, and will bring them a life of happiness. This might be true to some extent, but truth is, they just may not end up being happy afterall. In fact, wealthy people are more likely to suffer from depression and stress due to the amount of responsibility money brings. Millionaires have to watch their every move because the spotlight will be always on them. The phrase “with great power comes great responsibility” comes into play tremendously with this wealth. In my opinion, money should be looked at more as a concept than something you need in order to be successful.

(Explain what you mean by that last sentence. I didn’t understand it.)

Answer 3

Sadly, dealing with someone in authority being unfair to you is something you must learn to cope with for the remainder of your life. There will always be someone, your power company, a boss, a police officer, a manager or worker in a store you visit, who won't always treat you fairly. It is a hard, but necessary lesson in life. All you can really do is either try to reason with her, taking her aside after class to ask her one on one what her reasoning is behind these actions. Be sure to have facts to back yourself up. Don't just go up to her and say 'You're being unfair!' and whine about it. Instead say, you've noticed that she's given you such and such assignment while the other class got this, or didn't get this. And question why. Get a dialogue started. If she can't be reasoned with by students or parents, then the only other things to do is either try to be transferred out, or deal with her demands. Life will hand you that a lot and most of the time you'll find yourself better off just going with the flow. Good luck.

Answer 4

Obviously Mom is helping you but I wanted to say that I enjoyed reading your paper and you did in fact capture me long enough to read the entire work.

Keep going with it and you should get yourself a decent grade.