How is my Poem?

Question

Okay tell me if i need to add something or take out somehting
its about identity

please dont be mean...

okay here it is

School,
Smiling,Laughing,Fun
The girl You know as "Me"
"shes a cheerful girl"
Is what people say in glee

Home
Frowning,Scowling,Bored
The one you know as "me"
"she never smiles "
Is what people say and see

Which is the Real me?
Running, Playing, Talking
or Sitting,Writing,Silent
Which is the real me?

"She could die of laughter"
Different Opinions
"Her frown is like the darkest night"
Disparet People
I am confused
Which is the real me?

Thanks for honest answers
Thanks for good criticism
I actually can write better
but since i had to write this for school
i had no motive
but thanks again for your answers
i appreciate it

Answer 1

Constructive criticism: You need a lot of work. Please Don't let that discourage you. It's awesome to have the want to express yourself. Self discovery is a great topic. Everyone who achieves any level of awareness goes through it. Keep on working on your writing and it will improve with time and life experience. Keep reading a huge variety of poetry and fiction. Don't try to emulate any of it but feel other people's flow and find your own.