lol b honest
I love forever
its da most wonderful feeling ever, that carries somethin 2 end s just a never
but sometimes it may turn in2 deep suffer
n dis time u will have no choice but everythin 2 offer
my love,oh please,just stand by me forever but dis"ever" not always carry on 2 become forever
its da most wonderful feelin ever,that either curse ur life or make the way out 2 heaven
some people think its a lie n there s nothin called luv river
but I think ur not goin 2 forget bout dat feelin
da feelin dat there s somethin missin, until u find da treasure
da way out 2 river,not any river,only love river
hell yeah! its easy 2 make it 2 the river,but it's not,2 win da heart dats going 2 be urs forever n ever
n just then,u would get da real treasure, happiness forever,n untill da end of time,this s an "ever"
u think ur so clever n never ever goin 2 fall in dat luv river?
dats why they say fall in luv n not choose 2 luv!
its the da story of dat damn blessed river,love river
2007-09-25 09:14:45 · 4 answers · asked by BlueGurl26 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
This may be the first poem built around our modern need for text messaging. In that sense, it's groundbreaking.
2007-09-29 08:19:49 · answer #1 · answered by M O R P H E U S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly , it was going good till the phrase
( da way out 2 river,not any river,only love river )
after that I felt like u only cared for the ending rhyme ...
u got some words Repeated like u r trying to stuff the poem ...
If u Love poetry that Hard try to read more poem for older poets, they balanced not only the last word ..... they balanced each letter with the whole poem , like they are building a beautiful garden or curving a statue in the stones ... one wrong rose or one wrong hit and the Beauty is Over....
P.S. I can't taste the english poetry , but I know that there are some rules for poetry to proceed with to achieve a complete and fine piece of Poetry ...
2007-09-25 12:09:43 · answer #2 · answered by Haitham Emad 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I smile at you! can i've got somebody else in my Roman Penthouse? I actual have such extremely some selections and that i like to drink my Chianti Rosso Antico with P and the moon mild above inspiring me... you're a cool woman, too.
2016-10-19 23:13:02 · answer #3 · answered by hussaini 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wen u write a poem u never wanna use slang cuz wen u read it...u dont get the full picture
2007-09-25 09:18:39 · answer #4 · answered by Lillian G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋