Like an apple on a tree
Hiding out behind the leaves
I was difficult to reach
But you picked me
Like a shell upon a beach
Just another pretty peice
I was difficult to see
But you picked me
2007-09-23 10:17:26 · 7 answers · asked by rawrrr! 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
That is really cute. What is different in this poem, compared to most of the poems I see in this section is that youhave really good similes that you develop beyond just a throwaway line. That's my personal preference in poetry, to go into those analogies a little more. This reads very easily. It's quick, sweet and simple, and expresses a real depth for so few words. And I like the fact that you didn't get hung up looking for exact rhymes that didn't fit your purpose, but you went with close rhymes (I forget the exact term, somebody help me) that sound good and fit what you were saying.
2007-09-23 12:00:52 · answer #1 · answered by The Babe is Armed! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sweet little piece but better write:
Like an apple up a tree
Hidden behind the leaves
good for 'you' of the poem!
2007-09-25 05:16:11 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, simple effective and a realler upper for the day!
2007-09-25 19:03:36 · answer #3 · answered by kissaled 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it! but you spelled piece wrong it is p i e c e dont worry a lot of people spell it wrong..
keep up the good work!! keep writing!!! =]
2007-09-23 17:26:50 · answer #4 · answered by EA ~ Victorian asylum 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you spelt piece wrong.
very nice, may I post it on deviantart.com? my username is TexasDreamer01 on there and i'll give you credit. very romanticy.
2007-09-23 17:33:33 · answer #5 · answered by Rose du fantôme 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's nice..short but good......it's makes me think of the time when my <3 wrote me something like this...
i love it
2007-09-23 17:30:23 · answer #6 · answered by prettycutie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sucks
2007-09-23 17:24:42 · answer #7 · answered by 3464357 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋