On The Outside of the Inside
Written By Semper Fi Reborn 9/19/07
We don't get to choose our families.
We don't get to pick those,
Who form our early years.
We don't decide our siblings.
We just make due with what's given.
Strive to keep living.
Sometimes,
We're even on the outside of the inside.
Children want love and affection,
They want to be accepted, and just be.
They need recognition of their talents.
They need a push of encouragement.
So they can be!
Everything you said they could be.
Because they look up to you.
And openly love you.
Sometimes,
They feel they're on the outside of the inside.
Why can't they ever remember your birthday?
Why are you the last to know of any celebration?
Why do they want to disrespect you?
Aren't they supposed to love and protect you?
Now I have a wife and a family.
They keep me grounded and focused.
Surrounded by love.
All the things I needed from you first.
Yet you gave me none of the above.
That's why I'm on the outside of the inside.
Praying.
2007-09-23 04:10:29 · 7 answers · asked by Semp-listic! 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Thanks Elaine, I already have. It's just that I had to get this out of my system also.
2007-09-23 04:36:30 · update #1
Good poem Semper,and I would add...
...and yet with all that
you go on living.
Never hoping to get,
but continually giving.
Hoping of acceptance,
always elusive,
you share an emotion
that is not exclusive.
2007-09-23 06:01:34 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
The rhythm could use some editing, but the poem asks some fundamental questions. I like the image "on the outside of the inside." I picture you standing on the edge of a circle looking in, but not being able to step into the "inner circle." It's a very powerful image. I'm glad you've finally found the love you needed and didn't get in the past. Your next step is to let the past go and concentrate on giving back to your family what they're giving to you. Lol.
2007-09-23 11:24:44 · answer #2 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very good poem, what a shift between the second and third stanzas. You my friend are one of those people who give back to the world so much more than they ever gave you. And then expect nothing in return. God Bless, and as always you are in my prayers.
2007-09-23 14:31:17 · answer #3 · answered by Joel 2 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sadly, many of us live in the shadows of other's mistakes, it when we realize that the shadow is caused by something passing through the light. When we come to the place in our lives when we can "let go" of what ever caused the shadow, is when we can grow and not repeat the mistakes from the past.
Very nice poem, you show alot of us a part of humility that many here don't or wont show.
2007-09-23 13:33:12 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Absolutely LOVE the Title...quite a moving experience reading what you wrote.
One thing though.... I notice there isn't any word of forgiveness, but then, one step at a time, one poem at a time.... :)
Peace be with you :)
2007-09-23 11:36:18 · answer #5 · answered by ForeverSet 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
thank you for sharing from your heart. I hear you loud and clear. This is a most beautiful and constructive way to release what needs to be released. along with the power of prayer. this is actually a prayer from your heart. again thanks you inspire me to be a better person.
2007-09-23 12:03:20 · answer #6 · answered by KARMA IS IT THOU? 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it. It seems like you have some deeper problems though. It's very sad. Great job though!
2007-09-23 11:20:34 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋