Could you re-word my English writing?

Question

I am a self taught English student. I would appreciate if someone could help me by rewriting my Eng writing. I hope I can find some reasons why I made mistakes from the good explanation for me so that I won't make same mistakes next time. Thank you.
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Subject today is about Email for my friend
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Thanks for your sweet letter. I was imagining hugging and touching you and went falling asleep.

By the way, I read a story about a balloon that carried a man into the air in 1783, in France. I can guess how it floats in the air through this story with my simple knowledge of science. Now, I wonder how the airplane rises and fly in the air. I hope a spiderman is able to explain this for me, haha... It is good to have some basic knowledge about airplane to do my homework.
*** For the reader’s information: He used to be a pilot.

I am in a pickle living in Canada because English is my second language that is a obstacle for a job. I have pressure that I have to speak and write foreign language just like a native speaker. I can learn Japanese much faster than English and it is a piece of cake for me if I had to learn that. I will do my best, spider man.

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My sister phoned me last night and begged me to come back home. It was a strong temptation unfortunately. Anyhow, I am happy to meet you, I think, as you can be my good friend. Is it true? It's been a long time to meet someone that I can talk openly. Have fun with your work. Kisses for you...

Thanks..good advice. I will post simple paragraph from now on. I agree with you. Thanks for your attention....

Answer 1

"Thanks for your sweet letter. I was imagining hugging and touching you, and dozed off to sleep.
By the way, I read a story about a balloon that carried a man into the air in1783 in France. With my simple knowledge of science, I can only guess how it floats in the air throughout this story. Now I wonder how the airplane rises and flies in the air. Maybe Spiderman could explain this for me. Haha. It would be good to have some basic knowledge about airplanes to do my homework.
I am in a pickle living in Canada . The main obstacle I have in finding jobs is that English is my second language. I have the added pressure of having to both speak and write a foreign language just like a native speaker. I can learn Japanese faster than English. It would be a piece of cake for me if I could learn that instead. However, I will try my best, Spiderman.
My sister phoned last night and begged me to come home. It was such a strong temptation. Anyway, I am glad to have met you. I hope we can become good friends. Do you, too? It's been so long since I met someone that I can talk to openly. Have fun with your work. Kisses to you and good luck."


I have changed a few of the words for you in regards to tense, etc. and added others. Hope this helps. :)

Answer 2

Miss Know it All knows Nothing it seems! It's not too long for anyone to edit. It only takes a couple of minutes.....
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It is very good indeed.
I have made just a few very minor changes for you here:

Thanks for your sweet letter. I was imagining hugging and touching you and started to fall asleep.

By the way, I read a story about a balloon that carried a man into the air in 1783, in France. I can guess how it floats in the air through this story with my simple knowledge of science. Now, I wonder how an airplane rises and flies in the air. I hope that Spiderman is able to explain this for me, ha ha... It is good to have some basic knowledge about airplanes to do my homework.


I am in a pickle living in Canada because English is my second language. That is an obstacle for getting a job. I have pressure that I have to speak and write a foreign language just like a native speaker. I can learn Japanese much faster than English and it is a piece of cake for me if I had to learn that. I will do my best, spider man.


My sister phoned me last night and begged me to come back home. It was a strong temptation unfortunately. Anyhow, I am happy to meet you, I think, as you can be my good friend. Is that true? It's been a long time to meet someone that I can talk to openly. Have fun with your work. Kisses for you...

Good luck.

Answer 3

Using words from another language can add to the depth of a work and actually help the reader to learn something new and fun, but using too many can frustrate the reader. You don't want to alienate the reader by making your story hard to understand (by overdosing on another language). I like the idea of using footnotes to translate - this would help, although it might break the pace of the reader if they have to refer to footnotes too often. All in all, though, using another language is definitely ok.

Answer 4

I did not found mistakes in your letter

Answer 5

that's way to long for someone to want to edit.