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Question

i went to production department to apply there as machine operator. ive talked to the lady her name sinchu and she is the secretary of the director. she told me to leave my cv and call me once the director has reviewed my cv. until now she hasn't call me. she give me her e-mail and i want to write her letter.
what should i say?
is my grammar correct? please help.
Good day mam,
I am writing to you to follow up my applications. I went there last week to apply as machine operator. Does the director has reviewed my cv?
hope to hear from you.

Is this correct if i will send her a letter liek that? i dont need any opinion or whatever just correct my grammar and u will be awarded for giving me a nice answer.

Answer 1

No, your letter is not correct at all.

Dear Ms. ??
I'm writing to follow up on the application I submitted to your company on ?? (date). Has the director had a chance to review my cv?
I hope to hear from you favorably in the near future regarding an interview.
Thank you for your attention.
Sincerely,
??

Answer 2

Good Day Mam,
I am writing to you, to follow up on my application for employment. I was there last week to apply as a machine operator. Has the director reviewed by cv, as yet? I hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you ( then sign) does that help?

Answer 3

I'd probably write something like this:

I just wanted to follow up on the cv I left with you last week [or whenever - the more specific you can be, the better] for the position of machine operator. Has the director had a chance to review it yet?

Thank you so much for all your help. I hope to hear from you soon.

(Don't forget to sign it with your full name.)

Answer 4

Good day ma'am,
I am writing to you to follow up on my applications. I went there last week to apply as machine operator. Has the director reviewed my CV?
Hope to hear from you.

Answer 5

Dear Madam
re: APPLICATION AS MACHINE OPERATOR
You may recall that last week I dropped off my CV with you - applying for the above-mentioned post.
Kindly let me know whether the director of your company has had the opportunity of reviewing it yet.
Looking forward to hearing from you at your very earliest convenience.
Yours sincerely.....

Answer 6

Good day mam,

My name is ______(full names as on cv)_________ and I am following up on my cv that I submitted with you on _______(date)_______ for the machine operator's position. I would like to know if the Director have had a chance to review my cv or if a suitable candidate has been found.

Thank you and I am eagerly awaiting your reply.

______(Your name)_______

Answer 7

Mr_____ _____
HR Director
Company Name

Dear Sir,
A pleasant day to you and your company. My name is ________ and I am applying for the position of machine operator. I left my resume with your secretary, Ms. Sinchu, a week ago. As of now I would like to follow up on the status of my application.
Thank you for your kind consideration, I hope to hear from your company soon.

Very Truly Yours,
_______________

Answer 8

Here is what I would write:

Dear Ms. _____________,

I submitted my application for for the position of Machine Operator on ____________. This is a follow-up letter to see if you have had an opportunity to review my application. If my qualifications are satisfactory, I would appreciate an interview at your convenience. Please feel free to contact me at _____________ so that we can discuss the position further.

Have a great day.

Regards,

_______