My poem Please rate/? 1- 10 along with your interpretations?

Question

Moonlight Radiance

As i sit in my couch with only the moonlight to light me,
I wonder when the void will ever set me free,
Drowned in the pool of my imaginations,
looking intently at death's cruel intentions

I feel drained, powerless and exhausted
the chains that bind me hold hard without mercy
I feel like a dog, never tamed, never fed
not a single morsel of bread around so you see

Only the moonlight keeps me awake
in this shadow and its cruel stake
I feel my death is nearing, laughing, scoffing, thirsty for a fight
The eternal bliss i will never feel underneath the moonlight

Its radiance gives me life
and the power to end this cruel strife
I feel that i may never return
under my moonlight radiance that i call my home

Answer 1

For me, it's an 8...

Quite good...

You're describing a man awaiting his death...

And your choice of words are fine...

May I know what the poem is for?

It's good, really...

Answer 2

Hmmm. 7...
Of course, we have the image of the man tired and jarred of life, awaiting death... I feel also that the persona has some wish to struggle to remain alive "never tamed, never fed//
not a single morsel of bread around so you see."
Evidently, the persona also associates some soothing and calming effects with the moonlight, he even calls it his home. A powerful image which allows for further food for thought. But ultimately death is inevitable "I feel that i may never return//
under my moonlight radiance that i call my home."

Allow some further remarks. "Pool of my imaginations" and "death's cruel intention's" seem over-used metaphors. A fresher one would be better. And watch the technical stuff, capitalization and punctuation. Btw, I like very much the personification of death in stanza 3.

Answer 3

Soooo many answers from soooo many expurts.
BTW, just so you know an expurt is defined as:
1. ex, used to be, no longer, has been.
2.spurt, drip under pressure.
In conclusion an expurt is a has been drip under pressure.
Now with that out of the way I can begin my dissertation.
The meter was rather bad, the rhythm jumped around so much it was very difficult to read. Your rhyming scheme was quite bad also, make it the same throughout, and don't change the meaning to get a rhyme. Also tell all the RHYME IS WRONG sayers to buzz off. There is more good poetry that rhymes than there is that doesn't rhyme. Rhyme is not required, but it is your preference not theirs that matters when you write. Try counting syllables to give it rhythm, and if rhymes are hard to get, leave them all out. Partial rhyming and non rhyming mixed only serves to throw off the reader. As for interpretation, it's like Spanish or Chinese, if I have to interpret it, I ain't interested. Tell me what you're writing in your writing, don't hide it behind meaningless ambiguity. I'll hush now, I hope to see more from you.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

Yes , different interpretations of a poem are possible , but the poet's view should be both fixed & palpable , while the poem lends itself to various interpretations . Here , the poet seems uncertain , or is unable to convey that view . If he talks of Death with "cruel intentions" at one point , and as "eternal bliss" at another , it is unclear whether he longs for it as he seems to resent "chains that bind" him here , or whether he fears its approach .

Answer 6

5
kinda weakened by passion for end-rhymes hence inexcusable poor random lexical choices of third stanza like cruel stake and the cliche - thirsty for a fight

Answer 7

7.
It;s good but try to make it more poetic by using less obvious dictions.

This is about someone contemplating his/her final days either literally or figuratively.

The person knows that his/her final hours are coming, but he/she faces it bravely and somehow he/she retains his/her hopes (Its radiance gives me life...and so on)

Answer 8

its okay u use the same words alot.6

Answer 9

um. 4. so angst ridden.