once there was a girl,
in a paradise she created,
contented with life,
happy and free.
another day of laughter,
another day of fun,
another day of freedom,
another day of love.
little did she know,
a conspiracy was taking place,
creatures from the underworld,
longed for her destruction.
they hated her smile,
they hated everything happy.
with so much hatred they have,
they became one with it.
"flash" goes the lightning,
thunders go "boom",
as rain started to pour,
they planned for her doom.
she was caught off guard,
they know her weakness,
so they destroyed her love ones,
and everything she cared for.
her paradise was shattered,
everything was lost,
she couldn't help but weep,
for her heart is torn.
the creatures rejoiced,
their mission completed,
no longer was there,
a shimmer in her eye.
she has now lost..
her ability to love,
her ability to be happy,
her ability to hope..
it now depends on her,
on what path to take,
to fight or not,
to give life to what's lost...
2007-09-08 17:53:56 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Very well done. I think it was one of the better poems I have read lately done in free verse. It actually has a rhythm and the words flow. Easy to read, therefore fun to read. A star for this one.
2007-09-09 22:21:55 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
who is the demons or creatures? It was well thought. I thought it was very good. yea defintiely it was twisted, but hopeful. The only i dint like you opening. the first stanza or paragraph or whatver the hell it is called. the first 4 lines.
It was cool,
2007-09-08 18:25:08 · answer #2 · answered by shizz797979 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautifully written, good use of poetic devices, and it has a nice flow to it. But it's a little dittatched feeling-wise.
2007-09-08 18:20:53 · answer #3 · answered by Psymon Illa 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is an absolutely BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2007-09-08 18:09:46 · answer #4 · answered by ☆☃❀ ~♥~♪ tigger bitten ♪~♥~ ❀☃☆ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋