Is this a good cover letter to send to talent agents?

Question

Dear Sir or Madam:

My name is Elizabeth ------- and I am 14 years old. Enclosed in this package is a video shot of my sister and I for the “Clique Movie” try-outs. Sadly, we missed the online entrance date by a few hours, which is why we are contacting you. We would like for you to sponsor us. We believe that we both have the talent and the drive to succeed, how ever; we have no way to do so with out you. We do not expect to be able to make the “Clique” auditions, (we wanted too, but they will most likely be over before by the time we are able to contact one another) however, there will be other opportunities, and we hope to be able to seize them. Thank you for your time, and please read the next page for more information.


The next page has our DOB, eye color, hair color...... ect. ect.

If it's bad please tell me, but no rude put downs... PLEASE!

Answer 1

What you wrote is very good, but make sure to put your last name, the date, and your experience/resume on at least 1 of your pages.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

It sucks. First of all it should be addressed to a specific person (an agent at the agency), second it has to be very short, just asking for representation for you and a note that you will check with them in a couple of weeks to see if they got it. Third, it has to be from your parents, since you cannot enter into a contract until you are 18, you can do nothing as a professinal actor without their consent. Finally, it should have a head shot and resume with it. AND THAT IS ALL>

Answer 4

I would keep it as is, except I would delete:

(we wanted too, but they will most likely be over before by the time we are able to contact one another)

That phrase is repetitive and too wordy. Otherwise, it looks good- concise and upbeat.


Also, call the agency to find out the SPECIFIC name of the person to address the letter to, not "sir or madam".

Try to make sure you are following the proper actor resume format by looking up some examples online. Your first impression is important.

Answer 5

Hi,

try to imagine a busy agent's office with tons of mail coming in. The agent's assistant has stacks of mail, a backlog from the previous days, because they didn't get a chance to open it all.
I've heard agents say that they look for reasons to throw incoming mail in the bin.

Imagine how many people there are just like you, who want to become actors, or who think they do.

Now imagine out of all the thousands and thousands of aspiring actors, how many there just might be who are going to class regularly, because they really want to work hard and make it. They are willing to do anything. They study, not only to be good actors, so that they are ready for auditions, they also study what they have to do to make a good impression, how to write a cover letter and know what they have to submit and how they have to submit it to get an agent's attention.
I might be wrong, but your letter communicates that you are a young girl with stars in her eyes who woke up one day and said, "I want to be an actress.", but who has no clue of what to do and furthermore, probably has not had much training if any at all.

Now, try to think of what an agent would be looking for in someone that he/she wants to represent.
Why do you think an agent does that particular job; representing talent? To make money right? Right! By representing talent that he/she feels has a good chance of booking work after an audition.

If you were an agent, what kind of people do you think it would make the most sense for you to represent for you to make the most money? People who have no experience, no training or people who have at least some acting experience, can show that they are working on their craft and who can also demonstrate that they know how to write a cover letter and submit a professionally done demo dvd?
And add to that, the fact that you have literally thousands of headshots and resumes each year of folks to choose from.

So, what's your answer?

Now, what do you think would give you a better chance of being able to get an agent?

Think about that, and like Spike Lee once said (probably before your time), "Do The Right Thing".

You might be asking yourself what this all means. I have not be direct on purpose. Sometimes my grandfather used to tell me things that I didn't immediately understand, to make me learn something. When I would ask him to explain it, he would tell me to think about it. He said that if he gave me the answer, I would know it and then forget it. So now, I'm telling you the same thing.

What do you think you should do now?

The only hint that I will give you is that I am absolutely NOT telling you to abandon your dream, but rather to...

I might have seemed a bit harsh, but I can assure you that it's all in good faith. Really. I truely wish you and all those who think like you, all the best.

If you want to know more about what to do, come on over to my site.

Tony
http://www.actingcareerstartup.com

Answer 6

conceal letters could be short and to the component. brokers do no longer choose for to pay attention approximately you stumbling upon something, they choose for to correctly known you're extreme and dedicated. Your 2nd paragraph could in user-friendly terms point out that your final 2 initiatives have been XYZ and that's it. The final paragraph could commence with, "I delight in..." and that's it. in case you're SAG eligible or a SAG member then which could be reported on your resume.

Answer 7

looks good. I agree with what the first poster says.