She is an international Israeli supermodel known for her angelic innocent looks. In 2006 she received a two year deal with Israeli firm Fox, who dropped its four year cover girl Yael Bar Zohar. She was also featured on the cover of French ELLE magazine in February and March 2007.
2007-09-06 01:05:16 · 7 answers · asked by mbw m 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
She's an Israeli international supermodel known for her angelic looks. In 2006, she signed a two-year deal with the Israeli firm Fox, which dropped its cover girl Yael Bar Zohar after four years. She was featured on the cover of French ELLE magazine in both February and March 2007.
(I wouldn't mention Yael Bar Zohar, though. Sounds kind of petty.) I assume she's Israeli and an international supermodel (ie models around the world). Keep "international Israeli" if she's from Israel among other places (like born elsewhere, but grew up there or something). And the poster above was right about "angelic innocent" sounding redundant.
2007-09-06 01:33:15 · answer #1 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
She is an international Israeli supermodel known for her innocent and angelic looks. In 2006, she received a two year deal with Israeli firm Fox, who dropped its four year cover girl Yael Bar Zohar. She was also featured on the cover of French ELLE magazine in February and March 2007.
2007-09-06 08:15:41 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You left out "the" twice, and there are a couple of commas missing.
"THE Israeli firm, Fox"
"THE French magazine, Elle, in February and March, 2007."
(or you could say, "in February and March OF 2007")
The capital letters are just to point out the differences; you don't really capitalize "the"!
2007-09-06 08:29:52 · answer #3 · answered by bonitakale 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cosimo has it right. The international part rings tautologically as well because she features in a French mag. It can be dispensed with because the international implication is contained in the para. And finally, 'she was also featured?'
Drop the was because the past tense is contained in 'featured'.
2007-09-06 08:30:10 · answer #4 · answered by virtrava 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think your grammar is fine,except perhaps delete the word "innocent", as it is redundant.
2007-09-06 08:31:49 · answer #5 · answered by thegentle Indian 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"angelic innocent looks" is a tautology, because "angelic" implies "innocent" ... I would just say "angelic looks" - otherwise it's perfect.
2007-09-06 08:20:58 · answer #6 · answered by Cosimo )O( 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nothing wrong with it...
2007-09-06 08:13:40 · answer #7 · answered by Bella8 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋