my first resume, please help me make it better?

Question

i know it isnt that great, but ive never written one before. i at least tried to be as formal as possible and i watched for spelling and grammar errors. what could i do to improve it? oh yeah, ive removed certain details for obvious reasons

To whom it may concern,
My name is (blank), I am a 17 year old student at Blank Highschool, and I am interested in applying for your part time position a a photographer. While I have no formal work experience, I have taken an ROP class in photography during my junior year. I am very hands on, work very well with people, I have a willingness to learn, and I have no problems following instructions. If interested, my home number is [phone], and my email is [e-mail]
Sincerely,
(blank)

Answer 1

you put "a a" when I believe you meant "as a". I also think it'd sound better if you said

" I am very hands on, and I work well with people. (new sentence, instead of a continue from the last one) I'm willing and very eagar to learn, and I follow directions well. Thank you for your time, and consideration of my resume. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely
Your name printed here
Your signature here


Also, instead of ending your resume with your phone number and email, put it at the top of the page as a header. It looks more professional that way.

example

John Doe
[phone]
123 Sesame St, State, 55432
[e-mail]






Begin letter here.


Only, lined up better than I'm able to do on yahoo. Good luck getting the job. If you need anymore help I suggest looking up free cover letters, or cover letter samples, and maybe "borrowing" a couple of their ideas......and dont forget to attach an actual resume. what you got here is just a cover letter....a good cover letter...but employers are looking for actual resumes too. On the resume you can take the opportunity to list any jobs you've already had (if any) as well as the classes you've taken that apply to the job you're trying for.

Answer 2

I think what you have is really good; however, it is not a resume, but more like a letter of application. Google "sample resumes" for some ides as to format. You want to include your courses and grades at school, any other interests and try to get at leasts 3 people to act as a reference for you. Teachers or anyone you have worked for as a babysitter or anything after school. You must ask them if you can use their name and number first. Since you are applying for a job as a photographer, you also might want to add more info about your class in photography, for instance, what you learned, what your fav photos are. If you get an interview, bring examples of your work.