I declare for you my love
I declare for you my love
I declare it for the first time
I thought I loved thousands of times
But this is the first time
All the other times were a lie
And without you I would die
When first I saw you
I couldn’t resist saying I love you
The magic in your eyes
Made me fly up into the skies
You dwell deep into my heart
And nothing will break us apart
I declare for you my love
I declare for the first time
2007-08-21 12:44:58 · 11 answers · asked by ? 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Hi moon, yeah I wrote it.
(((Moon)))
2007-08-21 12:50:53 · update #1
thank you all for your comments.
Dancing bee I'm no poet.
Surprize, you can borrow it.
2007-08-21 13:13:20 · update #2
The one I wrote it for knows and I love her so much.
((((everybody))))
2007-08-22 02:03:36 · update #3
xxxxxxx for her.
2007-08-22 02:16:50 · update #4
How beautiful!!!! :)
Did you write it?
((((((Zalem))))))
Edit: Wow!! :) Thank you for sharing it with us!! :)
((((((Bella, Fair Damset, John O))))))
2007-08-21 12:48:34 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 6⤊ 1⤋
This seems a bit too generic. Great for a card, but not very personal. I say this as someone who really likes love poems ... okay I love love poems. I remember writing a poem like this once back in my twenties and the girl frowned and said, "why is this poem to me? It could have been for anyone." And she was right. It's not enough to make blanket declarations of love, you need to show not only the person you wrote the poem for, but any reader, that you are committed to your declarations, and that they really do mean something to you. Now besides that... there's the business of cliches: "...loved a thousand times;" "without you I would die;" "magic in your eyes" (there's a special Visine for this now); "deep into my heart;" "nothing will break (or tear) us apart". Those have just got to go. Imagine there's someone else out there attempting to gain the favor of your lover's heart, is this the poem you send? No, it is not. This poem gets you home by 9, drinking a beer and looking up old girlfriends to call.
Do well.
2007-08-21 12:57:58 · answer #2 · answered by Dancing Bee 6 · 5⤊ 1⤋
Amazing what love can do!
I don't know who you wrote it for, but I'm sure she loves it! You're gonna break a lot of hearts on here!
((((Zalem))) XXXXXX
((((Moon)))) OOOOO
(((DZE)))...I see you on the star list!
(((Fair Damsel))) took me a while to figure out who you are!
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2007-08-21 16:02:10 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 6⤊ 2⤋
Thats pretty good..do mind if i borrow that...???
Thanx man for letting me borrow it ur poem its cute lol
2007-08-21 12:52:22 · answer #4 · answered by the surprize 3 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Getting there. Good job.
From the sound of it, there is a real love there.
Do more.
2007-08-21 12:54:43 · answer #5 · answered by Dondi 7 · 2⤊ 2⤋
That's beautiful!!
2007-08-21 12:53:20 · answer #6 · answered by Chimichanga to go please!! 6 · 4⤊ 1⤋
Wow, beautiful!!!!
2007-08-21 13:45:17 · answer #7 · answered by . 5 · 2⤊ 2⤋
Love must be in your HEART!!!!
2007-08-21 16:28:22 · answer #8 · answered by tim b 5 · 5⤊ 1⤋
I do believe, I have just swooned...
YUP, I did...lol
2007-08-21 16:04:20 · answer #9 · answered by Kerilyn 7 · 8⤊ 1⤋
i like it..it's beautiful and damn your talented
2007-08-21 12:52:42 · answer #10 · answered by Rayray 5 · 4⤊ 1⤋