We are from FengYuan Chemical Co., one of the bigest manufacturers of oxalic acid in China.
With a history of more than 20 years,and thanks to our concentration on this one product, our goods have been shipped to many countries of the world(directly or via exporting companies), and prime quality,competitive price,prompt delivery and best service can be guaranteed.
Can anyone kindly help me make this paragraph beautiful?
Thank you in advance!
2007-08-20 21:45:46 · 7 answers · asked by lapoo 1 in Business & Finance ➔ Advertising & Marketing ➔ Other - Advertising & Marketing
I mean the language. is there any problem?
2007-08-20 21:51:26 · update #1
Thank you Solarius and Paris!
2007-08-20 21:56:45 · update #2
personnaly, i feel solarius's sentences are beautiful
2007-08-20 22:11:31 · update #3
FengYuan Chemical Company, one of the largest manufacturers of oxalic acid in China, has been supplying its customers with quality merchandise for over twenty years. By concentrating on a single product, we have built a worldwide client base. We are flexible in our shipping, whether directly or via exporting companies. Our quality, competitive pricing, and service are unparalleled.
2007-08-20 21:52:56 · answer #1 · answered by solarius 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
We are from Fen Yuan Chemical Co., one of the biggest manufacturers of oxalic acid in China.
With a history of more than 20 years, and thanks to our concentration on this one product, our goods have been shipped to many countries of the world(directly or via exporting companies), with kind prime qualities with a competitive price. We also have prompt delivery and best service can be guaranteed.
2007-08-20 21:50:39 · answer #2 · answered by Paris . 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Same thing, sliced in 3-4 sentences instead of piled into one
2007-08-20 22:11:51 · answer #3 · answered by pgreen 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is quiet okey the next move you should make is on how to present your company's profile in order to make it more interesting on the part of the buyer to be sure of the warranty in which you have to give.
2007-08-20 22:06:28 · answer #4 · answered by pretty 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't think that a chemical advertisement has the ability to be
'beautiful' I think that what you just said was fine.
2007-08-20 21:49:30 · answer #5 · answered by SmEllY! 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I can help if I'm not getting paid. If not that sounds retarded you do need help sorry unless I'm getting paid.
2007-08-20 21:50:52 · answer #6 · answered by Shane W 2 · 0⤊ 3⤋
i agree with paris, it is more gramatically correct.
2007-08-20 21:55:15 · answer #7 · answered by southernboy 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋