Are these sentences correct?

Question

I am doing a process essay and need some help please...

Immediately, you will reach the mall.

Now turn right onto Main Street.

Suddenly, you will see an intersection.

Now you have reached the College.

Thank you very much. Are the commas correct, and do I need a comma after now on the sentences that begin with now?

Answer 1

It seems to me the words, "immediately," "suddenly," and "now" are really not necessary for directions. These are very excited directions!

Answer 2

OK, not too many problems, more contextual. Hope this helps:
Immediately, you will reach the mall. = 'To your immediate right/left you will reach the mall' OR 'The mall will be immediately in front of you'. When used at the start of the sentence it sounds a bit odd.
The second one is fine, no need for a comma.
Suddenly, you will see an intersection. This confused me. Suddenly is a bit dramatic for directions but makes sense when driving, so we need to know if the person is walking or not.
Now you have reached the College. Fine, but no capital on college.
Hope that helps!

Answer 3

Maybe change the first sentence to "You will immediately reach the Mall"
I don't think you need a comma in the third sentence and I know you don't need a comma for the last one

Answer 4

You are having us on, young lady. Your 'CV' reads very well, but the above English is far from perfect.

If you're talking of driving instructions, then: " Straight away you'll reach the mall. Turn right on to Main Street [onto doesn't exist in proper English]; then you'll see an intersection. Now you have reached the college."

Answer 5

"immediately" and "suddenly" sound very strong for just giving directions. Just my opinion..:-)

Yes, you need a comma after the first 'now'.

For the second one, I'd rather say "You have now ....."
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