I am a 17 year old girl and currently a senior of the 2007-2008 school year. Next year I wish to go to college and pursue a job in Journalism but I have no money. I applied for a scholarship (I'm in the final 10 finalists!) and I need votes so if you could please read my essay and possibly vote for it or encourage others to then it would be VERY appreciated. There are also 9 other great finalists if you wish to look at theirs too.
Here's the link to my essay: http://collegetoolkit.com/ScholarshipContest/Finalists/Vote/ashummz05.aspx
If that doesn't work go to collegetoolkit.com and my personal finalist name is ashummz05, however there are 9 others also. :-)
You register, vote, and then do the email confirmation for it to count. This may only take a moment of your time, but it will be a huge part in my life.
Thankyou all.
My email address is ashummz05@yahoo.com if you have ANY questions.
2007-08-19 07:42:17 · 1 answers · asked by Oops, did I say that? 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
First sentence uses 'always' twice, remove one.
Second paragraph, 'whom' is incorrect, should be 'who'.
Fourth paragraph, should be 'help others out'.
2007-08-19 07:56:47 · answer #1 · answered by Robert S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋