My daughter wrote this, I would love comments. Please.?
Inside Army
Sometimes I wonder
If the battle is worth fighting
If I should give into the monster
The monster inside me, eating
Trying to swallow me whole
I try to stop it
Before it engolfs my soul
Or should I let it
I am a one man army
All alone to battle
A vicious thing inside me
Am I worth the rattle
I feel like giving up
For I am truly alone
I try to reach out
But nobody is home
I thought you were there for me
To help me fight my battle
Even you gave up on me
And now I feel so little
Once more on my own
To capture the creature inside me
The one that has only grown
Since you left my inside army
I wonder why I bother
Why I keep on going
I wish that I could smother
Myself and just stop living
Then I would just surrender
Myself to whats inside me
The beast would be the victor
And beat my inside army
2007-08-16 07:31:08 · 10 answers · asked by Sapere Aude 5 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Yes, she is depressed. We are helping her with that. This was written during that stage.
She is 17.
2007-08-16 07:37:47 · update #1
I think alot of people go through this and its the matter to get through it and not get stuck in it.
Anyways, I like it- its really heart felt and made me want to cry.
Hope she gets better! She'll be in my prayers.
2007-08-16 07:47:26 · answer #1 · answered by Bobbie 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sad and concerning. I am sure that as a parent here you must be worried about what your daughter is going through in her head. My oldest son was hooked on meth for a while and he would write things like this. He was such an intelligent boy, kinda deep. He is off the meth now but it took it's toll. (by the way....I think she meant to say "engulfed" rather than "engolfed".) Please don't take this as me saying she is on drugs. I am just making a comparison.
2007-08-16 07:39:43 · answer #2 · answered by maozSFCU 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-10 08:58:43 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How old is your daughter?
I assume rather young. The poem has a lot of heart in it but is weak on structure and a little thin as far as substance goes. It's the type of thing I would expect from my middle school students.
With a good coach, she could become quite a poet.
2007-08-16 07:35:35 · answer #4 · answered by sparki777 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very well written but it begs for help,I fell she needs to talk to a professional for some emotional and psycological help.
2007-08-16 07:37:16 · answer #5 · answered by s. grant 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Teenagers.
2007-08-16 07:35:00 · answer #6 · answered by ms_coktoasten 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Seriously? I think your daughter needs some help. She sounds depressed.
2007-08-16 07:34:53 · answer #7 · answered by Mi Atheist Girl 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice flow but it's kinda sad. Let Jesus fight your battle. He saves.
2007-08-16 07:39:27 · answer #8 · answered by Gir 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
i think she needed to get something off of her chest, she needs Jesus in her Army.
2007-08-16 07:40:22 · answer #9 · answered by cuzzintruck 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
she sounds confused and disturbed.
2007-08-16 07:38:43 · answer #10 · answered by lins 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋