Grammar help.... i don't want to sound stupid....?

Question

I have this letter I will send, but can someone make sure that is well written... i'll give you the best answer if you please help me. thanks. If anyone has any advice on what to say I appreciate that too.

Listen, I understand you are/were upset about what happened on friday. I will
apologize for yelling at you. I haven't yelled like that at anyone .I was just so pissed off that someone would, take my words and change them around. I honestly, think you deserve to know the truth. I know things will, never be like before... and, I'm fine with that.I just would really like
to have you as a friend because, you're really a cool guy.

That night that girl karlai(orwhaeverhernameis), came up to me and said, she had
something she wanted to ask me. So she said, “that guy kyle i think is trying
to get, in my pants, but, i'm not sure if I want to”;I asked, “why not?”. She said, that
she wasn't sure, because she was a virgin. Her friend said, that she wasn’t gonna let her do it because, she’d partied with you and knew what you were like. Then she asked me if I was a virgin, I
told her “no.” Then she asked me about my first time. I told her my own
personal story. I told her, I waited until I was out of High School and over
18, because I did not want to be another statistic.. I didn't want to be that
pregnant girl in High School who drops out. I was in a relationship with
someone I really cared about.

I then asked her friend if she was a virgin. She said, “no.” I asked her old
was she.. she said 19/20 and she was with him for like a few months. I told
her see, but, you can do whatever want or think is right. I just personally,
didn't want it to be some random guy who didn't give a **** about me, just
**** me then not talk to me and just give me STD’s or something. Then sarah
walked in and said, “yeah or some guy who's slept with like 80 girls.”

Then that Diana chick walked in with her friend, and we started talking about
dancing and going to a club and having a girls night out. I never once
mentioned your name or STD’s in the same sentence. No one ever mention the word Chlamydia
in there. I never said, “don't hook up with kyle.” She asked, about my own
personal experience and I was honest.

Now, that I told you what really happened . If you really choose not to talk me. I can understand and respect that. But, I hope things don’t have to be that way./

Answer 1

Listen, I understand you were, and maybe still are, upset about what happened on Friday. I apologize for yelling at you. I've never yelled like that at anyone. I was just so pissed off that someone would take my words and change them around. I honestly think you deserve to know the truth. I know things will never be like before... and I'm fine with that. I just would really like to have you as a friend because you're really a cool guy.

That night that girl Karlai (or whatever her name is), came up to me and said she had something she wanted to ask me. So she said, “That guy Kyle i think is trying to get, in my pants, but, i'm not sure if I want to." I asked, “Why not?”. She said that she wasn't sure, because she was a virgin. Her friend said that she wasn’t gonna let her do it because she’d partied with you and knew what you were like. Then she asked me if I was a virgin. I told her no. Then she asked me about my first time. I told her my own personal story. I told her I waited until I was out of high school and over 18, because I did not want to be another statistic.. I didn't want to be that pregnant girl in high school that drops out. I was in a relationship with someone I really cared about.

I then asked her friend if she was a virgin. She said no. I asked her how old she was... She said 19/20 and she was with him for about a few months. I told her that she can do whatever she wants or thinks is right. I just personally didn't want it to be some random guy who didn't give a **** about me; just **** me, then not talk to me and just give me STD’s or something. Then Sarah walked in and said, “Yeah, or some guy who's slept with like 80 girls.”

Then that Diana chick walked in with her friend, and we started talking about dancing and going to a club and having a girls night out. I never once mentioned your name or STD’s in the same sentence. No one ever mention the word chlamydia in there. I never said, “Don't hook up with Kyle.” She asked, about my own personal experience and I was honest.

Now I told you what really happened. If you really choose not to talk me, I can understand and respect that. But, I hope things don’t have to be that way.

Answer 2

there are a few grammar mistakes, like comma's in the wrong place and where you don't need them, it's not too bad though. I would send it as it is.