Hello, my name is Marissa and I am 22 years old. My ethnicity is Cantanese and Italian. I currently live in Staten Island, New York, but you can also find me in the Los Angeles or Miami area. I am very excited to meet new photographers, makeup artist and models to work with. I am interested in high fashion style, fashion, editorial, editorial style, swimwear, fitness, lingerie, casual, glamour,FHM/Maxim style, commercial print assignments. and maybe artistic nude. This is my job, so not only do I take this seriously but I am extremely passionate about my work. I am fun, creative, and need little to no direction, but am always willing to work with the photographers point of view. I strive to be very professional not only during a shoot but in all aspects of it, as I expect the same treatment from others.
2007-07-30 03:47:08 · 7 answers · asked by mbw m 2 in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
As always, revisions are more about style than grammar. By the way, a nice profile description and cheers for that.
Hello, I'm Marissa and I'm twenty-two. I'm proud of my mixed heritage that is Cantonese and Italian. I currently live in Staten Island, New York but I also frequent the Los Angeles and Miami areas. I am very excited to meet new photographers, makeup artists and models and work with them. My diverse interests in modeling include high fashion style, fashion, editorial, editorial style, swim wear, fitness, lingerie, casual, glamor, FHM/Maxim style and commercial print assignments. I am also curious about artistic nude works.
I'm extremely passionate about my work and am funny and creative. I can work with little or no direction, but I'm very willing to adhere to the photographer's point of view. I strive to be very professional about the shoot and all aspects of it and I expect the same favor from the people I work with.
2007-07-30 06:50:38 · answer #1 · answered by techguru 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hello, my name is Marissa and I am 22 years old. My background is Cantonese and Italian. I currently live in Staten Island, New York, but you may also find me in the Los Angeles or Miami area. I am very excited to meet and work with new photographers, makeup artists and models. I am interested in fashion, editorial, swimwear, fitness, lingerie, casual, glamour,FHM/Maxim style, commercial print assignments, and maybe artistic nude. This is my job, so not only do I take this seriously but I am extremely passionate about my work. I am fun, creative, and need little or no direction, but am always willing to work with the photographers point of view. I strive to be very professional not only during a shoot but in all aspects of the process, and I expect the same treatment from others.
2007-07-30 04:31:38 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Hello, my name is Marissa and I am 22 years old. My ethnicity is Cantonese and Italian. I currently live in Staten Island, New York, but you can also find me in the Los Angeles or Miami areas. I am very excited to meet new photographers, makeup artists and models to work with. I am interested in high fashion style, fashion, editorial, editorial style, swimwear, fitness, lingerie, casual, glamour, FHM/Maxim style, commercial print assignments. and maybe artistic nude. This is my job, so not only do I take this seriously but I am extremely passionate about my work. I am fun, creative, and need little to no direction, but am always willing to work with the photographer's point of view. I strive to be very professional not only during a shoot but in all aspects of it, as I expect the same treatment from others.
Some minor changes, but overall very good.
2007-07-30 03:57:26 · answer #3 · answered by dollhaus 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you really looking to improve your English, or are you just looking for a job?
Actually, the paragraph (if you're trying to use it in your resume, or as an ad) is fairly well-written. Trouble is, it is not clear on what it is that you are looking to do when you meet and work with these people. My guess is that you want to be a model.
2007-07-30 04:03:18 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
When you write ethnicity is that is singular. Since you have two ethnicities you should write "ethnicities are." Are is plural.
When you wrote "meet new photographers, makeup artists and models," makeup artists should be plural like the other two professions you are naming.
2007-07-30 03:53:56 · answer #5 · answered by Keith 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Too many first-person references. Who are you? Oprah? *laughter*
2007-07-30 07:57:25 · answer #6 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
nicely done!
2007-07-30 03:52:50 · answer #7 · answered by Nashville Guy 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋