*Ok please please please keep in mind that im 13 years old, and its my #1 dream in life to be a well known author, i understand that writing a story takes a long time and all, and ive been writing this for almost 10 months and im not even on chapter 3 yet. and another thing, PERSIPHONE_HELLIC, IF YOURE THINKING OF ANSWERING, DONT EVEN BECAUSE I DONT WANT ALL THIS **** FROM YOU ABOUT HAVING TO RESEARCH EVERYTHING. THIS IS MY STORY, ILL DO WHAT I WANT. anyways, please just give me an honest opinion. this is just the basic outline of the plot. its a modern days story, chara./settings are done.. So if you can please just tell me what you think of my plot and changes. Oh and i wanted to have one of thoes "wow that did not just happen" ending. all these stories today have endings where the main character lives and kills the bad guy, or they wake up and its a dream. i want to be differnt lol: well here it is....:
2007-07-25 13:00:57 · 9 answers · asked by bulletprooflonliness 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
girls parents are put into a coma after a car crash. the girl gets sent to a boarding school in ___. awhile after she starts having dreams of being in a dark forest (or whatever) and a cloaked figure is there over a dead body (and she cant see the face and it was killed a certian, obvious way, say by chainsaw and the figure is holding a chainsaw). The next day she finds out somebody she was angry at is dead and killed the way they were in the dream. So she gets scared shes killing the people so she gets someone to lock her in her room and the next morning the mirrior is shattered against the door. (later later later...) police are investigating all these murders and the girl is in her room looking in the mirror and her reflection starts going all crazy and talking to her and suddenly she has all these visions of the figure being her and then her reflection screams I KILLED THEM or whatever and then pulls out a gun and shoots her. paramedics come in the next day...
2007-07-25 13:01:20 · update #1
and are looking around the room, and the girl is dead on the floor in front of the mirror and a bullet in her head and glass in front of the broken mirror on the counter. Yeah and then the story is over. So what do you think? im 13 years old sooo yea keep that in mind. ive got the first bit of the story done and the settings and characters established and all that. i jsut wanted some opinions on my plot, and what would make it better? what should i change?
2007-07-25 13:01:32 · update #2
Impressive. Its a great story. However this may be even better in Hollywood. You should seriously consider being a screenwriter when you grow up. I have an even better idea. Do what J.K Rowling did and write a series of books and turn those books into Movies, you could make millions. Anyways its your book and you could write it anyway you want so good luck
2007-07-25 13:31:55 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like a good short story if you have a soild voice to your writing and use vivid details.
For 13 years old, you sound right on target, if that makes sense. I teach 13 year olds and I can tell you from reading short stories for 6 years, kids LOVE to write random stuff. A scene will happen and their best friend will walk by. If you want to be taking as a serious writer DON'T WRITE YOUR FRIENDS INTO THE STORY or Funny inside jokes just to fill up space. It distracts from your goal of telling an interesting story.
In all honestly the difference between a good story and a great story is how well its written. Is it able to take the reader on a journey. As the writer it is your job to make sure your reader sees the same picture in their head as you see in yours as your writing it. Does that make sense?
A good tip: When writing something exciting, use short sentence. It makes the reader read faster and build suspense.
good luck! I hope I didn't get all teachery on you. You've got a good start to a great story if you are will to stick with it.
2007-07-25 20:20:49 · answer #2 · answered by Erinn M 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
K you know what Persiphone_Hellecat, she is 13 years old and as an "accomplished" writer you should be encouraging
her, and others to write if that is what she has a passion for. As a 13 year old, i am sure she knows her writing is not fully developed yet, nor is she going to fly across the country to research schools, or fire guns, or any of that. Also, this probably being one of her first longer pieces of work, she most likely does not expect it to become a famous piece of work. And perhaps she is posting the question on her so as to see what others think of her idea so as to see if it will or will not be accepted. Or are you so self conscience about your own writing that you have to make fun of everyone Else's to say...gain power? And how do you know **** about her. How do you know she isn't in a writing club? How do you know she doesn't seek help from teachers? And also...who said ANYTHING about it becoming a novel. That's right. You don't know ****. So keep your yap shut and your fingers off the bloody keyboard and let her write her story how she wants.
And a word of advice. Open your bloody eyes. There are people dying left and right. Focus your attention on something more important than criticism.
2007-07-26 13:52:19 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 4⤋
Sounds familiar, like it's already been done. But don't let that stop you. Keep writing. The more you write, the better you'll get. As you go through school, take writing classes. But like anything you want to become really good at, it takes practice. Someday, we may be buying your books.
2007-07-25 20:11:52 · answer #4 · answered by Skatermomof5 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Well. Hmm. It sounds like a good book, but ... it seems like a plot like that would make for a pretty short book. And, yes, I know that there are details and that you didn't put the whole story here.
2007-07-25 20:09:28 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I agree with Skatermomof5, keep writing, even if you throw them away. Keep reading too. Steven King says that a writer can't be a writer if he/she doesn't read. It doesn't matter if it's good not not right now, practice makes perfect.
2007-07-26 11:03:04 · answer #6 · answered by robertlash19 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good luck honey ... you haven't got a chance in hell of ever becoming a famous author with an attitude like that. I did give you an honest opinion - one from a professional. Sorry you didn't like it. It's better you listen to the children here who have never written or published a damn thing than listen to someone who has, isn't it? So listen to the children who tell you that your story is great and you are the next Shakespeare. You've already wasted ten months of your life - go ahead and waste more. Honestly I could care less. Honestly there is ONE kid on this forum who knows how to write and he knows who he is. I really find it hilarious that someone who is 13 knows so damn much and yet they ask for advice. Why do you bother to post the same question day after day? I guess you need to hear the great things the other kids say about you huh? Makes you feel powerful? Smart? Well, trust me - you aren't. And by the way don't tell me what to do OK? Pax - C
Good idea MHP ... love it !!
2007-07-25 20:13:01 · answer #7 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 3⤊ 7⤋
Ultimate horror story is that you have won a national lottery to go hunting with Dick Cheney. And your parents encourage you to go.
2007-07-25 20:11:27 · answer #8 · answered by mhp_wizo_93_418 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i like it, i'm not too into horror, but it would totally be an awesome plot! I don't know if there's much i can say, but good job! :)
2007-07-25 20:14:56 · answer #9 · answered by Runner_4_Him 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋