Most of the characters in “Girl, 15, Charming but Insane” seem like they would make good friends, especially Jess, Fred, and Ben. They are all so nice, fun, and caring. However, I prefer intelligence, loyalty, and kindness in a friendship. Flora, in my opinion, would make the better friend because she fulfills all of these qualities. I think Flora and I would get along very well because we are alike.
2007-07-25 06:57:24 · 4 answers · asked by hollicrombie 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
The only mistakes I can see some teachers might want you to put a comma after the title of the book, as well as between well and because. However it doesn't need it really and would depend on the teacher.
I don't see any run-ons or comma splice, and the spelling looks really good. You'd have to nit-pick to actually find something wrong with it, good job.
2007-07-25 07:08:02 · answer #1 · answered by Yomi Minamino 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Most of the characters in the novel, “Girl, 15, Charming but Insane” appear to be amiable, especially Jess, Fred, and Ben. All of them are quite nice, fun, and caring. However, I believe intelligence, loyalty, and kindness are the predominant factors in a friendship. I think Flora would make a better friend because she encompasses these qualities. I imagine Flora getting along well with me since we share similar interests.
2007-07-25 14:18:08 · answer #2 · answered by sayamiam 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is very well written with no misspellings or glaring mistakes. The only suggestion I would make is to use, " the best friend" instead of "better", since you are comparing more than two persons. You are comparing Jess, Fred and Ben to Flora, so I would use the superlative form of the adjective, rather than the comparative, which is used when comparing only two persons. Other than that -- I have no problems with your paragraph. It's great! Good luck!
2007-07-25 14:28:43 · answer #3 · answered by gldjns 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The paragraph seems fine to me as is; I see no mistakes.
Bending over backwards to find something to suggest, I'd say you might omit the word "so" in the second sentence, or use "very" in its place.
But that's the only thing, and even that isn't a real mistake, just a matter of style.
So, good job!
2007-07-25 14:03:21 · answer #4 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋