A young lady inspired me.
Father of Heaven
Heavenly father help me see, what changes you have made in me.
Help me learn and help me grow, help me so that I will know.
Know your love, know your face, know where to stand my place.
Father creater, I hid my soul.
Thank you for loving me and making me whole.
Please if you are going to be mean spirited don't make a comment, but if you are mean spirited open up your email to recieve a comment and don't be a coward and just be mean. I you plan to make a good critcal comment please feel free.
2007-07-21 14:43:35 · 30 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Write a chorus and a few more versus and you would have a great praise and worship song.
2007-07-29 09:01:44 · answer #1 · answered by bsharpbflatbnatural 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To me, all poetry is awesome. But i think it's really, really cool that you can express your faith through poetry. The Lord listens, even if the words are in verse! God bless.
Here's one of my own. It's not the best of poetry, but i like it myself.
Flame
I have a flame,
a flame in my heart.
It burns fiercely,
giving much needed strength.
I feel it with love,
love of who I trust the most.
It burns with passion,
passion from above.
He sacrificed for me,
I'm willing to for him.
Yes, I'll spread the word,
to those who need it.
Flame, keep on burning.
This is when I need it the most.
I'll always have the fire,
deep inside my heart.
Keep the faith, brother.
2007-07-29 19:45:17 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it was beautiful. The only difference I would make is change it to know when to stand my place, instead of know where to stand my place (as in know when not to give in or "bend"). Other than that, it was great. You are very talented.
If anyone does make a mean comment about it, just ignore them. They are not worth your time.
2007-07-21 21:47:32 · answer #3 · answered by Pangloss (Ancora Imparo) AFA 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I like the poem...It's nice and can be esily understood....but how do a young lady inspired you? I'm just curious I had also written a poem last year and i wrote that because of hatred...
2007-07-21 21:49:08 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was beautiful. I have really gottne into writing poems lately, and I think that it's a very good way to express your feelings. I think that you have a lot of guts to post that on the enternet. Well done!!!!!!
2007-07-22 01:07:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well done pork chop, you wrote a good poem,
You honored your God, you call Him your own.
may He bless you today and bless you tonight,
and when you're inspired, and poems you do write.
God bless you! Keep up the good work! Cap'n Arlo
2007-07-21 21:56:24 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is what it is, isn't it? which is to say that it is at least apt; at most, on point.
You know one thing, next to telling someone that 'you love' her or him, which is the greatest thing to express of all, especially should you be one to show this by demonstration, the next best thing to emote and enact is 'Thank you.'
That you feature in your last line of your poem, with the word 'loving' in tandem.
Had you not spoken another passage, this last one does succeed at the entirety just by itself.
2007-07-29 16:15:58 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did you make this poem? I think it is really beautiful. And I would like permission to write it down and keep it. Thank you for sharing it.
2007-07-21 21:47:58 · answer #8 · answered by SDC 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very beautiful. I wish I had talent in writing poems. My always seem to turn into novels.
2007-07-27 19:36:48 · answer #9 · answered by Tammie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is certainly a heart felt poem! I applaud your creativity and your bravery in posting it on the site. Give thanks also to the lady who was your Muse. Continue to be inspired!
2007-07-29 15:09:27 · answer #10 · answered by glaux_athena 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋