Native English speaker: Is it correct?

Question

I am a non-English speaker, and learning English.
I wrote some sectences for my homework.
If there are something wrong, please correct it for me.

'What a sleepy day!
Even though it's raining outside.
I'm alone in my office doing nothing.
I want to sing, I want to dance.
What is happiness?
It was told that happiness is in your heart.
Doing nothing is a kind of pain.
Don't let me feel the emptiness.
What's the problem with me?
Time is precious,
but it doesn't stop even for one seconds.
I want to do something meaningful.
That must let me be happy and joyful.'

Answer 1

"Even though it's raining outside" is not a complete sentence. Do not use a period. Do you want to use a comma after "outside" instead?

"It was told that..." should be "I was told that..."

"...even for one seconds" should be "even for one second"

Answer 2

i only found two errors.
first error:
"Even though it's raining outside."
is incomplete.
to make it complete you have to have an action.
for example
i went to the get the mail from the mailbox even though it's raining outside.
second error:
"but it doesn't stop even for one seconds."
seconds is plural it should be singular since there is only one of them
should be:
but it doesn't stop even for one second.

thats all i saw. i am not an english teacher so there may be more errors. heck there may be errors in what i have typed.

Answer 3

"Even though it's raining outside" is a sentence fragment. You need to make it a complete sentence, but I'm not sure what you would want to complete it with.

"I want to sing, I want to dance." is a comma splice. You should put a period after sing.

"one seconds" should be "one second."

Answer 4

I'm going to correct you on these:
'I" want to sing; I want to dance."

"Time is precious, but it doesn't even stop for one second."

"That mus let me be happy and joyful!"

Answer 5

they are the two gramatically suited. i individually would use the 2nd, tutorial status of surveyed inhabitants, yet i don't understand why, greater of a gut instinct than something.