how does this sound as an objective for my resume?

Question

I am applying for a shoe store and i was wondering if this sounded right. if not could u help...i'm new at this.

To work in a place where I can effectively better skills in communication and selling and merchandise, to implement my skills in leadership, dedication and hard work into a positive environment comfortable for me as well as the customer

Answer 1

Seeking employment with your company where I can effectively utilize my customer service skills, sales and merchandising experience as well as demonstrating my leadership ability and offering dependability, dedication, team work and a willingness to learn new skills.
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Objective Statements Exercise
Brought to you by the Purdue University Online Writing Lab

To practice writing your objective statement, read through the information and answer the questions contained in this handout.

What is an objective statement?
A short section (usually 1-3 lines), often in the form of a sentence fragment, immediately below your contact information.
An "at a glance" picture of you and your career interests.
Other names: Professional Objective, Resume Capsule, Career Goals, etc.
Why write one?
An objective statement will allow you to:

Emphasize key qualifications, skills and/or goals
Help your readers find what they need to know quickly
Make a good first impression
A good objective statement answers questions:

What position(s) are you applying for?
What are your main qualifications?
What are your career goals?
What is your professional identity?
How do you get started?
Research individual employers in your field: In what ways are employers alike? Different?
Reflect on your overall qualifications and career goals: In what ways are they typical? Unique?
Questions to ask about yourself:

What are your main qualifications, strengths, skills, and areas of expertise?
What position(s)--or type of position--are you seeking?
What are some of your professional goals?
What type of organization or work setting are you most interested in?
Questions to ask about employers:

What qualifications are most desired by employers in your field?
What positions are available on the job market? What are they titled?
What are some goals of the organizations that interest you?
What kinds of organizations are now hiring?
Which objective statement is best?
The one that best…

Emphasizes your qualifications and/or goals
Appeals to employer expectations
You’ll probably need to write more than one objective statement.

Tailor for each type of position that interests you and, for best results, modify for each particular employer (as necessary)

Practice in writing objective statements

To write instant objective statements for practice, fill in the parts in brackets:

To utilize my [qualifications, strengths, or skills] as a [position title]
A position as a [position title] for [company name] allowing me to develop my [qualifications, strengths, or skills]
An opportunity to [professional goal] in a [type of organization, work environment, or field] using my [qualifications, strengths, or skills]
[position title] with emphasis in [areas of expertise]
This handout revised July 2001 by the business writing staff.

Answer 2

Shoe Sales Resume

Answer 3

You objective and what you write can be two different things. You may want to learn to beef up your resume for when you quit but you can't tell them that. Don't tell them you want to be comfortable you want to be part of a winning team.
Tell them you have skills already and want to use them.

Answer 4

This statement needs to be short and sweet. How about something like "To obtain a position in retail sales."

Answer 5

That looks good to me. Go with that. That is plenty good for anyone and it is very descriptive and defining. It is good.