is there any grammatical error on this paragraph? plz help me.?

Question

"Being different as an immigrant in USA, I was vulnerable to teasing, even though it has made me stronger and wiser person. When I first came to USA, I teased for my English accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers. I was not grown up in this culture, and I had teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.” I have heard those words a few times, even though it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one, who is an immigrant. So sometimes, I felt uneasy to talk with co-workers. Sometime they were talking about a baseball match, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, in which I was not familiar. I was not able to celebrate their holidays, and it made me uneasy. Sometimes in absence of me, they were making funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. However, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more to worry "

Answer 1

Dude, there is a lot grammatically wrong with this paragraph. I actually think that it is extremely effective the way it is now. If you want it corrected word-for-word, I hope that you find someone who has the time. I started to offer corrections, but found myself changing a lot of the original (I was omitting whole sentences and creating new ones in their place) and I just didn't feel comfortable trying to speak your words. Good Luck.

Answer 2

Hi, I read your paragraph and I made some grammar corrections. I also added and replaced some words to make it sound more clear. I hope this helps! : )

Being different, as an immigrant in the USA, I was vulnerable to teasing. Although it was tough for me to go through at the time, I'm a much stronger and wiser person today because of it.When I first came to the USA, I was teased because of my English accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers.
I did not grow up in this culture, and I was teased for that too.
“I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.”
I have heard those words a few times, and it really lowered my self-esteem. When I first entered the workforce I was the only one who was an immigrant. I felt uneasy talking with co-workers. Sometimes I overheard them when they were talking about a baseball match, or even a newly released audio album by a famous American singer. I was not familiar with these things and It made me feel out of place. Behind my back they were making up funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. Through all of this I realized we are all different from each other and
that there are more important things to worry about than some close minded and accepting people.

Answer 3

Being different, as an immigrant in the USA, I was vulnerable to teasing, even though it has made me a stronger and wiser person. When I first came to the USA, I was teased for my English accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers. I did not grow up in this culture, and I was teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.” I have heard those words a few times and it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one who was an immigrant. So, sometimes I felt uneasy talking with co-workers. Sometime they were talking about a baseball game or even a newly released audio album by a famous American singer of which I was not familiar. I was not able to celebrate their holidays and it made me uneasy. Sometimes in my absence they were making funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. However, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more important things to worry about. "

I fixed your paragraph. One question--why is it in quotes? If it actually a quote you needs to leave it as it is. If not, the grammatical changes are completed above. Good Luck!

Answer 4

It looks ok. Here are some hints. I'll use caps

"Being different as an immigrant in USA, I was vulnerable to teasing, BUT it has made me A stronger and wiser person. When I first came to USA, I WAS teased for my English accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers. I DID not GROW up in this culture, and I WAS teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.” I have heard those words a few times, AND it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one who WAS an immigrant. Sometimes, I felt uneasy to talk with OTHER co-workers. SometimeS they were talking about a baseball match, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, in which I was not familiar WITH. I was not able to celebrate their holidays, and it made me uneasy. Sometimes in absence of me, they were making funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. However, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more IMPORTANT THINGS TO worry ABOUT."

Answer 5

Yes, there are numerous problems:
Ss an immigrant TO THE UNITED STATES, I was vulnerable to teasing, even though it has made me stronger and wiser person. When I first came HERE, I WAS teased for my accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers. NOT HAVING grown up in this culture, I WAS teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.” I have heard those words a few times, even though it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one who WAS an immigrant. Sometimes, I felt uneasy talkING with co-workers. Sometime they were talking about baseball, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, WITH WHOM I was not familiar. I was not able to celebrate their holidays, and it made me uneasy. Sometimes in MY absence, they MADE funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. However, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more THINGS to worry ABOUT."

Answer 6

"Even though immigrating to the United States made me stronger and wiser, it also became a reason for others to taunt me. When I moved to the U.S., I instantly got teased for my foreign accent. English is not my first language, so my accent was not like that of native speakers. My peers teased me for not behaving the way they did, simply because I did not grow up in their American culture.
“I don’t want to talk to a guy with broken English.” I have heard that statement a few times, and it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one who was an immigrant. Thus I often became nervous when I knew I would have to talk to my co-workers. Once in a while, they would talk about an unfamiliar baseball match or even a newly released album by a famous American singer in which I was not familiar. I was not able to celebrate their holidays, and it made me uneasy. Sometimes when I was not present, they would fabricate "funny" stories about me. Many of my activities seemed odd to them.
However, I realized we are all different from one other. I learned that there is more to worry....



hope this helped :)

Answer 7

Hello! I edited your paragraph and revised the spelling and grammar. Sorry if I changed it too much for your taste, I really can't help myself! I want to commend you on making the effort, I can't even imagine what it must be like to be bilingual. Keep up the good work. Your paragraph (revised) is below. You'll notice that the biggest change I made is to make it into three seperate paragraphs. It was OK as one paragraph, but it is better as three. Good luck with whatever you need this for!


Because I was a immigrant in the United States I was vulnerable to teasing, although when I reflect on it, I realize that the strife made me a stronger and wiser person. One of the main things I was teased about was my accent, since English was not my native language. Since I had not grown up in the U.S., I was teased about my ignorance of Western culture as well. "I don't want to talk with a 'Broken-English guy. " Whenever I heard that phrase it really lowered my self-esteem.
At my first workplace I was the only one who was an immigrant. Sometimes I felt awkward talking to my co-workers because they conversed on subjects that I was not familiar with, like baseball, and famous American musicians. I did not celebrate the same holidays as them, and that was yet another thing that divided us. When I was not around they would make jokes at my expense, some of my activities differed from theirs, and they found me amusing.
However, in the end I realized that there are more important things to worry about. Everyone is different, and that is what makes each person special. I realized that I really just had to do one thing, love myself.


Note- My indents (or yahoo's) have gone totally wack. The beginning of each paragraph should be indented. I'm not sure if they will show up that way. Good luck again!

Answer 8

your mistakes will be capitalized...


1. When I first came to USA, I teased for my English accent.

When I first came to THE USA, I WAS teased for my English accent.


2. I was not grown up in this culture, and I had BEEN teased for that too.



3.I have heard those words a few times, even though THEY really lowered my self-esteem.


4.In my first workplace, I was the only one, who is an immigrant.

no commas!!


5.Sometime they were talking about a baseball match, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, in which I was not familiar.

here... just rewrite this sentence like this...
SometimeS they WOULD BE talking about a baseball GAME, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, in which I was not familiar WITH.

this is a great paragraph!!!
just a few gramatical errors!!
just fix them and you will do great!!!
good luck with what ever your gonna do with this paper!!
<3

Answer 9

as an immigrant in THE usa....made me A stronger...came to THE usa...i WAS teased...not like THAT OF native speakers....I HAVE not grown up...and I WAS teased for.....**I have heard those words a few times, even though it really lowered my self esteem----you mean --times, SO it really....I was the only one who was an immigrant (no comma)...(Erase the so) Sometimes, I felt uneasy talking to coworkers.....a NEWLY released audio album by a famous American singer, WITH WHOM i was not familiar....sometimes DURING MY ABSENCE, they MADE UP funny stories.....the last sentence makes no sense so revise it....but you need to practice parallelism- keep everything in the same tense (either all in future, present or past tenses)....and practice structuring the paragraph better

Answer 10

When I first came to (the) USA,
I (was) teased for my English
English (is) not my first language,
I (did) not grow(no n here) up in this culture
and I (was) teased
(and) it really lowered
I was the only (no comma here) immigrant (comma here, not period), (s)o sometimes (no comma here) I felt uneasy to talk(ing) with co-workers.
a new(ly) released audio album
Sometimes in (my) absence
they ma(de) funny stories
Some of my activities seemed funny to them, (comma here not period) (h)owever, I realized we are all different from
I learned that there are more to worry (this is all the way wrong, and I'm not sure what you are trying to say) I learned there are greater things to worry about. I learned there was more to worry about. (?)

Answer 11

Hey buddy, don't mope around. First of all, English is not your mother tongue, right? So, it's just natural and understandable to commit mistakes in grammar. The people who teased you should have known better. And they're not grammatically perfect either. Nobody is. Even grammar experts err. Anyway, intelligence is not measured just by how well you speak. The more important thing is you get understood. I understood what you wrote, and for me that's enough. But if you want to improve though, just practice. Observe. Engage in conversations. If you get teased, retaliate and turn it into a positive. See it as constructive criticism, and try to correct it next time. You'll get better with practice.