Terribly cliche, I know, but...?

Question

would you lovely people mind telling me what you think of my poem?

I'm more of a thoughtful analysis sort of person, but I happened to find this sandwiched between momentum equations and trig notes in my notebook and I thought it to be one of my better poems. So, here goes:

I like the idea of 'kind of perfect',
of the sweet resonation of chords
accompanying sweeter sounds spoken.
Simple spontaneity.
Planning may equal perfection,
but sometimes 'sort of' is better than 'all of'.
How beautifully brevity can result.
He who said 'What is started must be finished,'
obviously overlooked the in-betweens.
No, perfection hardly matters when heart takes the stage.

Oh, sorry, when referring to the cliche, I meant that about 3842732567 people ask "What do you think of my poem", and I couldn't stand to post that as the subject line.

But thankyou. [[:

And I did think I went a little alliteration crazy. And again. Haha.

Answer 1

Seriously this isn't cliched at all. In fact, I challenge you to find a cliche in it. I really enjoyed your use of alliteration in lines 3-4. It was a really interesting poem. Please share more of your "cliched" work lol.

Answer 2

I absolutely love that this poem was sandwiched in between your trig notes and equations! It really speaks for the poem and the poem itself seems to speak back to those damned equations that demand absolute perfection. It is a beautiful poem. Keep it up. Read Mary Oliver's poem "Wild Geese." I love what it says about perfection vs love. Seriously, look it up on the web somewhere right now and read it. After reading your poem, I know you will love it--it will change your life.

Answer 3

Nice poem. It's almost perfect.

Answer 4

i think its a good poem

Answer 5

Very nice, well done