(finding my family)
Tiny World
Swinging in the breezes
From adjacent family
Unraveling I
Tried to tie
Fray rope flying free
Stained and weathered
Not fully severed
Looking for a place to be……..
Swinging in the breezes
From adjacent family
Spinning in tornadic winds
Relief ahead I spy
Warm air flowing
Through my hair
A rainbow in my site
A final snap
The rope let’s go
Spiraling am I?
Swinging in the breezes
From family of mine
Plummeting an abrupt stop
On the colors of the world
Swinging legs on a rainbow
Relieved to what’s unfurled
The winds died down
And removed the frown
The frown
From a little girl
Now,
Singing in the breezes
Of this very tiny world
2007-07-14 11:47:57 · 12 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Man !! I wish I knew how you do that?? I have a poem,but never ever in a million years will I post it now.... Wow,I love that...
2007-07-14 12:30:27 · answer #1 · answered by Lucky 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
How tiny is tiny how super is massive? If tiny is two or 3 inches i'm high-quality with that. yet once you're conversing 8 or extra inches i think of it is to important for me. Sorry i'm petite. So i think i will take the small kit.
2016-11-09 08:19:02 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very symbolic this one.....could be left to the reader to intrepret what it has to say....could be life with all its ups and down experience by a family seen through the eyes of the little girl.
2007-07-15 07:13:58 · answer #3 · answered by soundfamiliar 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This left me wanting, not just at the end, but throughout the poem. To me, something raw and real was left out. It's all very sweet and ends nicely. I don't know why I feel there is more here you could contribute. This is my first impression and I'm going with it.
2007-07-20 12:45:29 · answer #4 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it you really are a dreamer
Swinging in the breeze from my family trees
to depart left me spirling on a breeze from tree to tree so where am now will I ever be free
2007-07-14 13:50:18 · answer #5 · answered by kilroymaster 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great descriptions, nicely done!
Allthough full moon was much more fun!
Dont get me wrong I like this too,
Despite how little the sun,
May come! Keep Writting!
2007-07-14 16:29:01 · answer #6 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is awesome
it describes family,
while swinging in breeze
2007-07-15 05:01:03 · answer #7 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Lovely on multiple levels. I really liked that. Wow. Wow. Made me tear up, it was amazing.
2007-07-14 12:12:56 · answer #8 · answered by ツSpeckles 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very deep and interesting.
Almost like free falling.
2007-07-18 23:12:01 · answer #9 · answered by Freebird-Robin 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good poem, one correction:
"Fray" should be "Frayed"
Otherwise, it's a good one, one of the better ones you've submitted.
2007-07-18 18:01:49 · answer #10 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋