Imperfect Mom
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With broken wings
raising angels
in a
cold
dark
place
head held so high
as she tries to hide
the
dangers
faced
all she can do
to pull them through
is push
on
and
pray
showing them strength
the whole d*mn length
for they'll
be
alone
someday
2007-07-14 11:44:06 · 15 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
One thing you seem to do so effortlessly is put together interesting structures for your stophes. It worked very well in this poem.
2007-07-14 14:06:02 · answer #1 · answered by Todd 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I did not think it is a sad poem.....but a true one.....when i read it the first time....the first thing that comes to my head is the truth behind what the poem is saying.....arent we all the imperfect mom and arent we all trying as much as we can to make situations or conditions or living perfect for our kids and arent we all in the end will come to face and except the day when we cannot be there for them anymore.....and like the poem suggest the only thing we can leave behind is the experience or things we have manage to teach and convey through our own actions to our kids on how to survive.....and hope and pray that life will not offer them such hardship.
2007-07-15 14:09:38 · answer #2 · answered by soundfamiliar 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I read your three poems, up now.
They represents so well entire your force.
The feelings are crashing any form into space.
This is poetry.
These are feelings.
And you know it so well ...
I am looking patiently for your next poems, when it will be the time, with better feelings, as for you are so much strong and you'll give to all of us the Real Poems of the Real Forceful Feelings.
All the best to you,
Thks you came on here, too, for we could know you.
2007-07-14 22:15:14 · answer #3 · answered by :)(: 5 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Dark and desolate is the tone of this poem you can write all types it seems like!
This one is grreat, so divine!
I can not lie! Keep Writting!
2007-07-14 23:22:42 · answer #4 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I liked the style and the content. Really rings true to life...good job!
2007-07-20 03:16:35 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like the symbolism, not depressing at all- very real. but it did not at first express the fear of raising a child and having to let them go, intensify your vocabulary and your writing will improve greatly. potential is there.
2007-07-21 14:26:39 · answer #6 · answered by the critic!! 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yeah i agree it's sorta depressing i liked full moon better! But it is good don't get me wrong.
2007-07-14 18:52:16 · answer #7 · answered by Barb S 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Wow you are talented. Sad and sweet, very very nice
2007-07-14 19:13:55 · answer #8 · answered by ツSpeckles 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
interesting,
she shows her battle of imperfection
she does everything
but no one is perfect
but perfect or not still mom.
no matter what.
2007-07-15 11:54:29 · answer #9 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Amazing! It's exactly the way I feel....
2007-07-20 00:05:54 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋