(not your typical write lol)
Full Moon
I knew
A man
His name
Was Tom
He could
Not keep
His blue
Jeans on
He was
Not fat
He was
Not thin
His jeans
Just slipped
Right off
Of him
He wore
A belt
And pulled
It tight
He thought
That this
Would make
Things right
But, then
He knew
He thought
Too soon
And walked
On home
With a
Full moon!
2007-07-14 11:39:56 · 18 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I am,
having trouble...
...Stopping writing
in two
sentence lines.
I am,
however sure...
...the effects
will pass
in time.
2007-07-14 14:24:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
Ok, I read your other two poems first and I'm like, okay, this one will be beautiful and sad, it's about a lonely moonlit night...and I literally cracked up when I figured out what was going on. Very funny, gave me something to laugh about when I expected to cry.
2007-07-14 19:17:58 · answer #2 · answered by ツSpeckles 2 · 4⤊ 0⤋
I thought this was very well executed in the style, simplicity, elegance, humor and understatedness (you see where I'm going with this?) of great limerick writers. Good job! You have a talent for this kind of writing.
2007-07-19 08:37:00 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I made me smile knowing that someone can actually write a funny poem. My poems are usually depressing. I have another one I'll be posting in a few minutes. I'm calling it "Insanity"
2007-07-14 22:22:16 · answer #4 · answered by Argent 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i love the part about "he was not fat, he was not thin, his blue jeans just slipped off of him". i'm not sure why, that line is just incredibly memorable.
i like your poem. it seems like it could be in the foreward or introduction of a book by the author that writes Weezie Bat.
2007-07-14 18:49:30 · answer #5 · answered by Original_Syn 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
This one is really cool. Normally short line lengths can sound really choppy...not this one, it had good flow. Very funny.
Well written Shad.
2007-07-14 21:03:20 · answer #6 · answered by Todd 7 · 5⤊ 0⤋
Great poem ; and it was good and even a little funny; i really liked it a lot,,,,
2007-07-14 18:54:48 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Very clever and funny, really liked it. Well done x
2007-07-21 11:16:53 · answer #8 · answered by libithina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I, like Tom,
Wiggle along,
Weighted pocket,
Floppy wallet,
Pull and tug,
Tighten and tie,
Cuffed up,
Scrunched up,
Half moon pie...
2007-07-14 21:26:33 · answer #9 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Bravo! Your protagonist may not be, but that is one skinny poem.
2007-07-14 21:38:56 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋