She said maybe in some years
She'll miss the crowds and miss the chears
But now she hears this guy trash talking
She's working out, she does fast walking
I must admit she's lQQking good
Her bikini fits just like it should
And Rocky had these moments too
If theres a dare, he followed thru
How can he keep saying stuff
Haven't I pounded him enough
Oh what the hell I need a thrill
Just make sure he has a will
He is calling her a liar
It gets her mad, she's now on fire
He said that what you told the crowd
It wasn't true, but said it loud
Oh that thing about his love
And then I nailed him with my glove
I really said That when this fight is all done
My hubby's making a beer run
And then I'll dance up on a table
For as long as I am able
And if my clothes go everywhere
If men don't touch then he don't care
2007-07-14 01:20:36 · 3 answers · asked by edgar b 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Another good one, but you've got some editing to do here. There are several lines that don't have enough beats and others that sound more contrived than they should be. Have someone read them out lout to you and you'll hear the hardspots. You've a good enough ear and a way with words to fix what's wrong. Overall, a good concept and a good start.
2007-07-17 18:34:50 · answer #1 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't think any of it is funny, but I do believe it is an attempt at humor.
2007-07-15 23:31:19 · answer #2 · answered by Dan-Bi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The first two were cute. This one...not so cute.
2007-07-17 00:17:34 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋