You said that you had cancer, You told me you would die.
I couldn’t quite believe it but you looked me in the eye.
I thought you’d stay forever, I thought my kids would meet you
You told me you were leaving, there was nothing you could do
I watched you quickly crumble, you turned into a wreck
My strong mentor gave up, with this noose around her neck
I can’t lose my granny, God knows she drives me round the bend,
They said you had a full year yet and you’d see it to its end
We both knew you wouldn’t though, we knew you’d given in,
Who could blame you for it, no reason to bear and grin.
Walking home a few weeks later and I began to cry
I knew I had to tell you I loved you and say my last goodbye
I knew that you were leaving that night, something told me so
I fell to my knees and pleaded with god, please don’t let her go
I knew that it was a selfish want, and I knew you were in pain
But each extra day I spent with you was such a massive gain
Granda came to meet you that night, I felt his touch in there
He had came to guide his one true love to heaven through the air
He lifted you gently in his arms and carried you away
I looked up at the bright white light, “see you another day”
2007-07-11 22:13:36 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
You are so gonna hate me......if you're about 12 years old, then it's lovely. But I have to say hun, it's not a poem.....it's a rhymme.
If this is about your gran dying then the sentiment in it obviously means a lot to you & I'm sorry for your loss. But you didn't ask about the content, you asked what we thought of your "poem" I've given you my honest answer. I haven't meant to be cruel......just honest.
Poems don't have to rhymme.....rhymmes do.
2007-07-11 23:21:03 · answer #1 · answered by Funky 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A seriously moving poem. As sad and personal as it may be, its something you should keep and look back in years to come.
When i read it, it made me think of my uncle who passed away suddenly 3 years ago... Certainly will have an effect on people who read it, which is what a poem should do.
2007-07-11 22:29:57 · answer #2 · answered by Putting on the Foil 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem seems to explore your deepest emotions towards a situation you had been through I think it must of been very therapeutic and insightful for you.
I hope it helped you to get through this difficult period.
It is a very personal poem. You should frame it and keep it as a keep sake for you and your future family.
Best Wishes
Nai Nai
2007-07-11 22:19:47 · answer #3 · answered by nai nai 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Heart wrenching stuff!
It sounds like a really personal story.
Its a lovely poem.
2007-07-11 22:20:05 · answer #4 · answered by Charm 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You deserve a Nobel award for the best poem!
2007-07-12 01:08:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well done, that poem was almost a tear jerker. what about this poem.
I know a person who could write,
his poems were as deep as night,
i met him on this website,
i hope he finds answers right!!!
2007-07-11 22:30:02 · answer #6 · answered by xxDanaxx 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Amazing.
Im sorry if it was your loss in real life too.x
2007-07-11 22:28:09 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
BEAUTIFUL!!! sorry for your loss though xx i lost my nan to cancer so i know how you feel xx
2007-07-11 23:18:20 · answer #8 · answered by whatanutta 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it. I can hear the love and pain.
2007-07-11 22:18:11 · answer #9 · answered by miss_laura_jane 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow...what a tear jerker... and you thought of that yourself ? here, have a star! :)
2007-07-11 22:41:18 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋