I'm trying to get up the courage to write a book. What do you think of my first poem submitted here?

Question

Ode To Poe

Dark, decrepit, dreary damned night
Fills my bowels with stones of fright
My eyes shift from the left to the right
While shadows dance in the pale moonlight

No human should walk the earth at this hour
Per chance to meet some unearthly power
I watch, I listen, I dodge, I cower
While heart burns, stomach churns, and mouth tastes sour

The cold wind howls with evil glee
Anticipating my destiny
I know some spectre waits for me
To rend, to end mortality

I watch it standing up ahead
With fingers of bone and eyes of red
Beckoning me to join the dead
I change my path, with feet of lead

I begin to tremble and I can swear
If only in mind, there's something here
And I die in waiting, there's death in fear
Damned night be gone, glorious dawn appear

Answer 1

Pretty good could be better with some tweaking.

Answer 2

Just gonna get straight to the point. I think that you have talent. Always try to go for your goals and ambitions..... Its good to always ask and sometimes talk about your hopes and dreams; but be careful because not all people will want to see you succeed. It has a dark tone too it; which I know that's what you wanted it to have..... Just wanted to comment on it because I'm a christian. I also write poems and plan on one day publishing a book of poems for the nation to read. I have several that I wrote already, they just come naturally. I think this type of poem is called a traditional poem ( don't quote me on that). If you were to look up my answers I also wrote a poem to help out someone. View it and tell me what you think. Good luck on getting your poems published, you definitely have the gift........

Answer 3

I like this much. I'll put a star on it, and come back to read it, as right now I've got to GET THE HECK OFF THE COMPUTER & INTERNET

but hey, I think you do have talent, & I hope you keep writing, dreaming, composing, revising, and get published often and in the right places.

Answer 4

Hey, this is amasing! Talent! On yahoo! -How rare it is.

I liek your title, too; Poe was a master of these writs, and though I'll admit you're an apprentice as of now, definitely keep writing. You're on the right track and I can see your raw talent will become something profound if you nurture it.

Do share more!

Keep writing, absolutely!!!!!

Answer 5

WoW! That's really good! You really should write a book cuz that was a great poem. I love the scene you portray so well with your descriptions and how easy you make it look by all the rhymes! You HAVE to write a book.... :)

Answer 6

Run ************ RUN. I didn't like this part ======>

Fills my bowels with stones of fright