I pray
Coins, golden and silver
Rain down from Heaven
Wealthing me
Currency
Green tapestry
Woven mint for me
Covers everything
Vault so high
Reach to the sky
Enriched keep change
Funds mentality
Top of the heap
Bottom most line
Untouchability
Capital City trickle up
2007-07-01 01:48:31 · 8 answers · asked by TD Euwaite? 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
nice, bro. I LIKE the use of "wealthing" as a verb, it was one of two things that caught my eye on first read.
second was "green tapestry/woven mint for me" which gave me visions of expansive carpets laid throughout the mansion made of hundred and thousand dollar bills.
I take "bottom most line/untouchability" to mean that at the very least the monetary answer to your prayer should make you comfortable enough that you never have to worry about money...
"Capital City trickle up" throws me, and though I guess I understand the line on its own, I don't get its meaning as the last line of the whole piece.... I don't mind that, I just wonder if I'm missing something.
2007-07-01 03:27:48 · answer #1 · answered by Kurt H™ FC Steaua Bucureşti 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very insightful and metaphoric. Your use of rhythm is wonderful. I enjoyed reading it and I think other people will too!
Constructive criticism: Check on the use of "Wealthing" as a verb and "bottom-most" I believe should be hyphenated.
Other than that--- KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING!
2007-07-01 08:51:57 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read all your poetry. Some of your efforts actually result in real poetry. I love the concept of this one and am looking forward to seeing more.
2007-07-01 08:54:00 · answer #3 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well I think it's a good poem. You've got me beat. Good Job.
2007-07-01 08:54:10 · answer #4 · answered by lovely 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you're broke and need financial help. ;-p Just a guess.
2007-07-01 10:35:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like I like I like. Clever, witty..."wealthing me" "funds mentality" this is SO much better than rhyming names! LOL
2007-07-01 12:17:51 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kinda weak & not the best of flow to it either.
2007-07-01 08:54:12 · answer #7 · answered by wesley_1971 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
can you spare a quarter, brother ?
2007-07-01 08:51:24 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋