its a poem i wrote for her, give me some feedback
Your the one that makes me wake up everyday
You've got my heart, in your own little way
The way I feel for you is indescribable, it's just so great
I always ask myself why, and the answers always the same, it had to be fate
Your the one I want to spend forever with, I just know
It's two months down, a lifetime to go
2007-06-27 04:37:22 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
not bad Hey I would like it
2007-06-27 04:40:21 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey don't worry, I got this one under control. I love poems, I write them all the time, even tho I'm 16. Just check my poem out at poetry.com. Look under my name Candace Magnia:
Your beautiful face is the first thing that comes to my mind,
thats because you treat me so wonderful and kind.
There's nothing else I would ask for in this world,
I love you and your the only one that can be my girl.
The way i feel for you is indescribable,
because our love is nothing but desirable.
You got every bit of my heart,
just to let you know, I don't want us to ever be apart.
Use this one right above, I put yours and what was in my head together.
2007-06-27 04:58:09 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
How about: Everyday that I wake up
My heart is in your hands
I feel so great that I just can't describe it
I know that fate brought us together
You're the one I want to be with forever
We have a lifetime of happiness
2007-06-27 04:44:12 · answer #3 · answered by yopude 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its freaking awesome, but I would change the I just know its 2 months down, a life time to go part.
2007-06-27 04:41:59 · answer #4 · answered by L 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your poem is great and really sweet, she will love it. but any girl would like any poem you wrote for her because its from you and its unique. is this a proposal to her???
2007-06-27 04:41:48 · answer #5 · answered by erica leigh™ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. I wish my guy would write me a poem.
2007-06-27 04:43:56 · answer #6 · answered by iberiaangel 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds sweet, I think she will like it.
2007-06-27 04:40:31 · answer #7 · answered by Maria b 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes
2007-06-27 04:39:30 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice and sweet but can be improved on a little .....
2007-06-27 04:41:24 · answer #9 · answered by aunt_webby 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its sweet and great good job!
2007-06-27 04:40:53 · answer #10 · answered by alexis_vallin 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋