Life's a pleasant tradition.
Life's wing is as vast as death.
Life's a jump the size of love.
Life's not something,
we put on the mantel of habit
and forget.
It does not matter where I am.
The sky is always mine.
Windows, ideas, air, love,
earth, all mine.
Why does it matter if sometimes,
the mushrooms of nostalgia grow?
Let's take off our clothes.
Water is just a foot away.
Let's have a basket and
fill it up with all the greens
and all the reds.
We are not to comprehend;
the secret of roses, but maybe
swiming in the incantation of roses.
Or may be looking for
the song of truth
between the morning glory,
and the century
2007-06-21 20:41:32 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Sohrab Sepehri was one of Iran's premiere poets. I appreciate his work and mourn his death.
You should probably give credit to him in your question.
2007-06-21 20:47:02 · answer #1 · answered by ? 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yes and no, its more of a prose, an accumulation of thoughts..., it lacks rhythm, I don't mean rhyme! It has too many questions.
"looking fot the song of truth between the morning glory... nice, but the century does not make sense there.
good luck!
romasogna
2007-06-22 01:29:33 · answer #2 · answered by tinroof 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i must admit i dont like many poems that dont contain the word 'poo' and it hasn't got many ands in it, perhaps if you allow me a tad of editorial conceit we could have
Lets have a basket and
Fill it up with all the greens
And all the reds and perhaps some poor blues
good luck anyway mark b
2007-06-21 20:54:56 · answer #3 · answered by mark b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok i think u must have had one of those lonely confused moments which we all get from time to time wondering what life is all about have a nice day
2007-06-23 04:42:15 · answer #4 · answered by mickeymousey 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very deep and moving.
I loved it, as one poet to another you should think about getting your stuff published, as long as it is all your own work.
Well done.
2007-06-21 23:19:00 · answer #5 · answered by rafena 1979 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It needs some work. Something to tie it together better instead of random disconnected thoughts.
2007-06-21 20:47:27 · answer #6 · answered by Ronnie 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It raises nice images and nice ideas. It is nice reading.
2007-06-22 16:38:46 · answer #7 · answered by Mr. Bodhisattva 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a deep one, but very good.
2007-06-22 04:21:59 · answer #8 · answered by Max 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats very inspirang u should rite more poems
2007-06-21 21:41:11 · answer #9 · answered by matthew f 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's a good one. did you compose it?
2007-06-21 20:48:13 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋