does this novel i'm writing sound good to you? be honest?

Question

basically a love story set in medieval land (made up) but not like Eragon and packed with new races and stuff. there are a couple, but these aren't the man focus at all! they're mentioned like an afterthought.
The storyline in BRIEF:
There is a queen who is average looking. she meets a poor boy who is beautiful. They sort of fall in love, but she is more mesmerized by his looks; she lets him into Court, marries him off to a rich girl (so he can stay with the rich 'gang' but she deliberately chooses and ugly girl, so there's no risk of him falling in love with her.) Thins go well, he is rich, and him and the Queen have like a secret relationship. But then things change- he becomes arrogant (he was innocent before) rude, he gets into drugs that the rich guys all take (cos it's a made up land, i made up the drugs also) and she realizes he hasn't seen his family in months. So she forces him to leave. It's kind of sad.
i'm writing it anyway, but i just want opinions.

you've picked up on the drugs thing i see. but if you look at my other questions, you will see that i know all about the kinds of emotions involved with drugs. it will come from the heart.
this wont be the main focus at all, it's a minor subplot.
but thanks for the great advice all of you! :)

Answer 1

It sounds like it could be interesting, but the entire thing is going to depend on how well you describe the characters and the various conflicts they encounter. Don't make it too weird and too outlandish. People tend to want to read stories that deal with them, with their own feelings and with their own conflicts. Go for it, it sounds interesting.

Answer 2

I'm curious how the Queen "sort of falls in love" with the man, but marries him off to a rich girl. Does that mean she is intrigued, fascinated, even compelled to sleep with the man, or live out her days in fantasy over him?

As others have said the plot can be enriched, but stick to a drug common to the times like opium.

I hope your novel is off to a good start, but I question your grammatical skills based on your question and narrative. In my experience, good writers write well in all venues that include Internet forums and message boards.

But perhaps you were in extreme haste to post your question, sacrificing good writing decorum.

I wish you well with your book.

Answer 3

well.... the book could be interesting, it all depends on how you spin the plot out. it seams as if it might get boring after a while. i dont really get why she would force him out of court just for getting caught up the drugs and stuff that most rich people do, since she kinda forced him into that life. i hope it turns out good though.

Answer 4

Sounds like something a preteen girl would like a lot. But it does sound interesting. You should use a real drug like opium or something that they actually used back in the day so it doesn't get to outlandish. Just my thought, don't have to listen though. Good luck with the book.

Answer 5

Well, it could have potential. But personally, I wouldnt read it. I just think some of these plot points have already been tried and tested (in other scenarios and characters), and after a while people get bored. But thats just me. If you did write and publish this, it would probably sell.

Answer 6

yes this is an interesting story line i would love to read the story though. I hate to read the back of the book before i start a book.
keep going and keep me posted

Answer 7

It sounds like something that I would take a look at on the shelf. Normally when I look at something I either buy it or rent it from the library. Keep writing.

Answer 8

one suggestion, I would drop the drugs thing, or instead of witing it in a medevial setting, do something more modern (especially with the whole thing where he hasnt seen his family for a long time)

Answer 9

It sounds good but you have to write it really well, but I would read it.

Answer 10

um...sorry it doesn't sound that interesting to me. there's no plot, no reason to open the book up sorry