Rain trickles down into the valley,
Overflowing past its girth.
And in its abundance;
So prospers does the earth.
And lo the land - how she cries for joy,
And lets loose a dirty tear.
But lo to the men below,
Who cringe in dire fear.
2007-06-13 10:25:56 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Actually no, it wasn't sexual.
What I was trying to say was that what might be good for nature may very well be bad for mankind.
I may be 14, but I'm NOT a pervert.
2007-06-13 10:30:07 · update #1
And I wrote it.
© 2007
2007-06-13 10:34:59 · update #2
Is that the only verse? Why are the dudes afraid? Finish the cool story!! It's pretty!
On a more serious note, It flows really well, good word choices.
2007-06-13 10:29:38 · answer #1 · answered by The Hungry One 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
You could have done better but 1-10 1 the lowest i give a 8!
2007-06-13 22:08:03 · answer #2 · answered by Jamie W 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's kewl, but probably not from the depth of your soul. I've written some kewl level 1 poetry too, but if you want to draw attention . . get risky, passionate, daring, contraversal . . . get 15
2007-06-13 18:05:08 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! You have real talent. You should enter that in a contest. They are on the web all the time. Yahoo has one I think. I loved it!
2007-06-13 17:29:24 · answer #4 · answered by thepetmomma 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
depends how old you are. . .
adult: its ok. you have way too much time on your hands tho
6-14: its really amazing- enter it in a competition!
15-18- really good, try to justr touch it up a bit and it could go far!
2007-06-13 17:30:35 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A very good poem, subtle but obviously sexual; I like it and think whoever wrote it did a terrific job.
2007-06-13 17:28:23 · answer #6 · answered by John B 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very nice! It has a whimsical yet real feel to it. Great job!
2007-06-13 17:27:59 · answer #7 · answered by Jade 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it! It's very good, did you write it? I was quite surprised, expecting to find a boring poem, but this is really good, .... I enjoyed it!
2007-06-13 17:35:13 · answer #8 · answered by hotttdott 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the word trickle turns me on...
but in any case it rocks... keep it up!:0)
2007-06-13 17:29:42 · answer #9 · answered by Cool Guy With Long Hair 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
on a scale of 1-10 i say it would get a definite 9.5.
2007-06-13 17:30:50 · answer #10 · answered by pyro king 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋