Know what I mean?

Question

Consumed In Apathy And Waiting:

In addition to my absence of tolerance for standing still
My sympathy for the weak has diminished considerably
My growing apathetic nature concerns me in no form
And this hole in my head is finally numbing

I’m feeling unmotivated in the entirety of the word
My complete lack of desire for anything is creeping out
My secret is getting out
And in some diminutive way I almost wish I could feel concern

I have not a care or preference for it would mean not a thing, for now
And I could only live with that for so long
So long before the lack of my fill would bring tremendous pain upon me
And nothing but disarray could remain

And so because of your hypocrisy and refusal for democracy, here I am
Once again I’m settling for second best when in the end I know
Oh yes, I know
And still, I’ll have to wait for that

Consumed in my apathy, I'm stuck here waiting
But not for long before it's so long, to everything
And everyone in my way
Before long, it'll be so long

Writing isn’t about making people feel good… it’s about expressing yourself, in most cases, it’s a type of therapy. Obviously, you can’t relate or have never been stuck somewhere you don’t want to be. I wasn’t trying to depress anyone (Elaine P) you must not be able to read something (if you’re not feeling the same way) and appreciate it for what it is. Poetry must not be your thing…

Answer 1

It's interesting! It could use some cleaning up, but the concept is great. I , in my younger years, have been there.

Answer 2

Its great. The trouble is some talent comes of sorrow and its not actually a great feeling for the person. Pardon me for saying great. But its got literary value and I understand how you feel. I've been through stuff like this.

Won't say hope you continue, cause that'll mean you continue to be depressed. So hope you start feeling better soon enough. But don't lose the talent.

Good going. And all my good wishes with you.

Answer 3

I liked it. =)

It was a tad bit emo for my taste, and it reminded me of my awful days when I suffered from some serious depression and insecurity problems that have since been taken care of naturally, without the aid of medication.

I liked it. Keep it up. You ever want to talk, give me a ring on AOL instant messenger. MACH2000.

Answer 4

Very nice.


this electric energy contained within, i feel it move against my skin, wearing my , wearing me thin...life is this sin?....oh **** where would i begin..........i feel this hurt this unfortunate pang...wondering if this existance....is yin or yang...

....i see this existance so much like a pendulum .. back n forth..on contrary wings...back n forth...oh and life entails so very many things....i hate this lack of action... i wonder what it means...definately not the cessation of all life...nor the umbrage of strife..but i begin to comprehend..that all things have time...begin and END.

Answer 5

I get it. You're depressed. So you wrote a whining letter in verse form and made the rest of us depressed. Misery loves company.

Answer 6

I know what you MEAN. I could have written most of this myself if I were that good at writing. Keep it up - you have great ability.

Answer 7

i have been on a cocaine binge all week and havent been able to sleep but after reading this long wordy poem i was put quickly to sleep in a coma of boredom.

Answer 8

ya i know what you mean.