This poem is true, tell me if you like it, and if I should send it to 'her'
I realize it won't happen
But know this.
My heart is yours
To fill,
To burn
To burst
To comfort it
Breathe in
Breathe In so deep
This air is blessed
You inhale
You exhale
You breathe
I worship the refuse of the air
That you breathe
Your words are harsh
I told you I loved you
You couldn't even talk to me
You had someone talk through us.
I don't blame you
But know this.
I know I can't stop
I've tried
But to no avail
I still love you
Nothing will change that
Its like even though
You get embarrassed
By just acknowledging that you knew me
Once upon a time
You don't know me
But I know you,
Hell I know you.
Let's mean again
Lets talk again
I wanna feel happy
I haven't since
You took my heart and took my challege
You took my heart and you burned it
Its nothing now
It's better off black
It's better off halved
It's better off dead
So why not kill me?
I just wanna tell you,
I still love you
No matter what happens
If you declare me a threat to your security
Lemme die
Just let me talk to you...
I realize it won't happen
But know this.
My heart is yours
To fill,
To burn
To burst
To comfort
You chose to burst it.
I'm incapable of smiling
But one thing Im capable
Is loving
I still love you
I still love you
You still comfort me with my burnt out heart.
You haven't succeded in ruining my love
You tried
You failed
I'm sorry
I still love you
You chose to burst it
You chose to comfort my burnt out heart.
2007-06-06 16:06:17 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
yes I do like Dashboard Confessional :D. I know this wasnt a very good one. Im kinda tired. have a nice day :D
2007-06-06 16:13:08 · update #1
I'm not going to gain any benefit at all. I'm just trying to express my feelings. I think she thinks I don't like her anymore, but...heh read the poem.
2007-06-06 16:14:39 · update #2
I can't just write a love letter! I mean I still love her, but I'm not happy at all! These are my emotions! I'm always depressed, I can't just write a love letter just saying how i love her! I already did that in the first place and look how far that got me.
2007-06-06 16:16:53 · update #3
I understand what your saying but I can't do that, I'm not IN control of myself. My emotions are.
2007-06-06 16:19:23 · update #4
Its good, and romantic...but some parts are excessive, maybe go back, reread, and edit some parts out. Anyways, if a guy wrote this to me...I would probably be very happy.
2007-06-06 16:11:03 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I consistently write poems to human beings i admire. The final guy I fell in love with however (my husband), did no longer comprehend any of my poems, i assume that's what i'm getting for marrying somebody whose community language isn't english or maybe latin based for that rely.
2017-01-10 17:23:53 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. Although it is a good poem it does not display a man who is in control of himself. You can write poetry if you want, but by doing so you may end up creeping her out. What I'd do is tell her that you are a poet and you like writing poems. Show her your stuff but don't say it's about her. She'll appreciate you more for your talent and she won't be creeped out by you.
2007-06-06 16:17:54 · answer #3 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice... well written friend... it reminds me of my latest relationship.. i love the ending
"You haven't succeded in ruining my love
You tried
You failed
I'm sorry
I still love you
You chose to burst it"
YES send it
2007-06-06 16:12:06 · answer #4 · answered by Kemuel M 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is not a good idea. What are you trying to achieve? Ask youself if sending this will achieve that end or in fact if it could possibly reap any benefit for you. I think not.
2007-06-06 16:12:59 · answer #5 · answered by Moondog 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No , it sound like you are feeling sorry for your self ! sorry, but you could write one about how much you love her and don't talk about yourself being dead or hurt over her so much ! you talk to much about what she has done to you like hurting you so much. but i say a love poem that is postive is better if you love someone, express it in a loving way !
2007-06-06 16:14:02 · answer #6 · answered by monkeymomma46 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WWWWOOOOOOOOOWWWWWW, thats is absolutely beautiful!!!!!!!! I loved it and I'm pretty sure she will too. It's so honest and real. It's like I can feel ur emotions just reading this poem.
2007-06-06 16:13:38 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
do you like Dashboard Confessional????
2007-06-06 16:10:12 · answer #8 · answered by Jon B 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
o my god, i love it, you should definatly send it. it sounds like my problems now
2007-06-06 16:11:44 · answer #9 · answered by redneck girl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dont know.. but if you think so..
2007-06-06 16:09:54 · answer #10 · answered by Pi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋