opinions plz?

Question

wind is blowing,
picking up speed,
birds fly away,
people run,
protection is rare,
near or far,
then after at all,
the destruction,
the wreckage,
the fear,
there is an uneasy calm,
an awkward serenity,
peace

Answer 1

Pretty good. It is quite fast, and the high speed of the wind in the poem matches the speed of the poem itself.

Answer 2

I have only two definition of this- Its either an African Thunderstorm or a Whirlwind. I can't help feeling that somewhere something is missing........ the poem began without warning and ended without warning. however there is an ever noticable hint of Suspense.
try this beginning-

From the west
The cloud came hurrying with the wind
Turning and darting sharply here and there
Whirling
Like a mad man chasing nothing.............

Then Try this ending lines, and i bet ur work will be splendid!! -

Men running
Women screaming
babies changing on their backs
dart about
in and out
amidst the pelting march of the storm
Then calm
but all was not the same again.

Answer 3

nice short and succinct poem, sweet to hear, dense to bear. A thing of beauty in my view without any flattery

Answer 4

I like how you never say outright exactly what you are talking about. a bit of abstraction in poetry is always good.

you are presenting an image of a tornado[, hurricane, or other storm], no?

Answer 5

It's not that bad. Did you write it cuz if u did it is good!

Answer 6

decent work :)