My first love
You were the one
The only one
My very first love
It only lasted a while
But you always made me smile
You knew how to make me happy
Especially when you called me sweetie
My feelings showed that I really cared
And I will never forget all the memories we shared
I really did like you
I even loved you too
I know we always loved to talk
I wished we could have take just one walk
I wanted to hold your hand
And say that you were my man
Losing you is something I will always regret
You, I will never forget
We never hugged or even kissed
But, you, I will truly miss
I wish we could be together
But you will always be treasured in my heart always and forever
You were my very first true love.
2007-06-01 16:07:20 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i really love it u are a really good poem writer
2007-06-01 16:10:02 · answer #1 · answered by erikaolsen12 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Just some constructive criticism...
You should work on expanding your vocabulary. Nothing here is very original and it all seems rather disingenuous. And poetry doesn't have to rhyme! In fact, you could probably come up with something more creative if you avoided rhyming. Keep at it, though!
2007-06-01 16:15:32 · answer #2 · answered by Joakim 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a GREAT poem!
&&i think these writers..they need to make happy endings too..cuz ive never read a love story poem with an happy ending, i mean like serioulsy if they dont write it...where are we gonna get are hope from.
I love the poem anyway though. its a good one.
♥Traci
2007-06-01 16:12:03 · answer #3 · answered by T 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Love is like friendship caught on hearth. interior the beginning up a flame, very exceptionally, in many circumstances warm and fierce, yet nevertheless in basic terms mild and flickering. As our love grows older, our hearts mature and our loves will become as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable." - Bruce Lee "I relatively have discovered the anomaly, that in case you like till it hurts, there could be not extra injury, in basic terms extra love." - mom Teresa
2016-11-24 23:40:57 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
beutiful remarkable you are a good poet next try a free verse but its an amazeing poem Great Job :)
2007-06-01 16:12:23 · answer #5 · answered by Tekedo 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems sweet i like it there are alot of good poets online when u look
2007-06-01 16:10:32 · answer #6 · answered by Constant 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't pay attention to any guys that respond,because most of them just don't understand. I l'd it.
2007-06-01 16:16:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
>>>hugs<<<<
this is the story of my life
thanks for sharing it, very nice!
2007-06-01 16:13:15 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was brilliant! Great job...there is a site http://www.my-poetry.com if you want to have it rated and get comments from more people.
2007-06-01 16:28:24 · answer #9 · answered by Pisce-Pegasus 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm sorry I wasn't reading, did you just take a picture of crap, put it in writing and posted it?
2007-06-01 16:09:33 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋