what do you think of my poem??

Question

EvEryoNez TrYna "Fit-In" sO they can be accepted.
Look around ..Ladies N fellaz B tryn to acT N looK *Perfected*
Half Of da PeePz pretend ta smile even when dey feelin down.
In rainy days..hurt..and dey Find demselvez alone with no1 around..
The world makes ya believe your personality Cant B showN,
ure face must be picture perfect and wear cloths just the best, to be KnowN.
Theres so much happining..But noone can see!!!
Realness ..thats all it matters if dey Could be!!
"Them-selves" N accept this word called "We"
Lets B ourself!! We cares about "He or She"

Answer 1

it is ok

Answer 2

well it could be better written to be a poem instead of using numbers for letters and using slang isn't that very good for a poem but other than it is good! I'm not trying to hurt your feelings either just putting my two sense in on the way it would look and sound if written better.

Answer 3

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not inevitably ought to rhyme regardless of the undeniable fact that it needs to hit my thoughts. i think of readability of expression is significant besides. i do no longer desire to 2nd guess what i'm examining approximately. I continuously seek for what I time era "poetic gem stones"interior the text textile.

Answer 4

First of all, your spelling is so bad (intentionally or not), that it's barely coherent. Second, it really doesn't say much, does it?

Answer 5

Try making it a little less "ghetto" and we might actually understand what you are trying to convey.

Answer 6

If I ignore all the typos, I like it a lot. It has a positive message.

Answer 7

I think that u have a talent. This poem is very well written.

Answer 8

its hard to understand but I love the words

Answer 9

if you could please repeat that poem in english, i may be able to understand what you've written and give you an honest opinion about your poem. lol. i'm sure it's good.

Answer 10

Sorry I can't read your spelling.

Answer 11

I really like it. Gr8 job.