deja vu
its deja vu
im talking to you
dad,father,what ever you will
guess its time for another pill
its not just cowincidence
your a hypercondriac
now its time to react
you fool you liar you con
your the kind i look down upon
i knew not to trust what you said
this is the day me and my mom
have gone to dread
no more sympathy for you
you get what you choose
what else can i say
its deja vu
BY:Harmony Gjertsen
Just let me know if you liked it and what where your thoughts on it thank you.
2007-05-29 23:42:25 · 6 answers · asked by fdffhhjyuj 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
yes. you should turn it into a song. thats how good i think it is.
try to make some more verses.
2007-05-29 23:47:25 · answer #1 · answered by Kaz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is a very poor sympathy message here that does not coordinate the mental receptors that a truly great poem induces.~~
2007-05-29 23:53:36 · answer #2 · answered by burning brightly 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yes. you should turn it into a song.
2007-05-29 23:48:49 · answer #3 · answered by Dreamer 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's okay but try a bit harder.
2007-05-30 01:08:21 · answer #4 · answered by meredith 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its too ummm, stupid dumb bad and poorly done
2007-05-30 03:04:28 · answer #5 · answered by gangster.girl1 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
huhu...not too bad
2007-05-30 05:19:37 · answer #6 · answered by xxsmastersxx 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋