I just recently wrote some poems and I just wanted to see what everyone thought of it.. any suggestions, opinions ideas are greatly appreciated. THANKS!
What's The Point?
What's the poing of living
When all you want to do is die?
When that part in your heart is missing.
How can you live knowing that, that void
Will never be filled again?
You hear peope trying to help you
They tell you to "stick it out"
How can you "stick it out"
When it makes you sick just the thought of
Losing all those precious memories?
It's more complicated then I can explain.
It's like an addiction that
Takes you through the stages of desperation.
It could never be the same,
It makes your life seem so lame.
Like you can't blame it on anyone, but yourself.
Whats the poing of living
When all you do is hope to die?
2007-05-29 18:28:23 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
very depressing but really good.I write these kind of poems when i'm really depressed it makes me feel better
2007-06-02 11:14:05 · answer #1 · answered by blueeyedbaby41 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poem good, but make me sad.
Remind of what it like to be teenager again.
AAACCHHHHH! Hard times.
Me never want to be teen again. Teens are mean people.
Don't try to "stick it out" Get busy with something useful and stop feeling sorry for your self that is big waste of time.
What you feel now will get much better when you grow up and get smart like me.
UGH!!!
2007-05-30 01:49:46 · answer #2 · answered by Ye Olde Caveman 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems it raises poses some fundamental questions about living! It has this confounding spiritless tone
2007-05-31 01:54:11 · answer #3 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's a beautiful poem...I love poems like that, and I can relate to it. Don't listen to people putting your poems down because they're too sad or whatever. It's wonderful. =]
2007-05-30 01:38:07 · answer #4 · answered by Rebecca 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds more like a journal entry than a poem.
Keep trying.
2007-05-30 01:33:21 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
5/5. i really really like it. Sound like u took ur time and put a lot of effort. Sounds wonderful
2007-05-30 01:30:59 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Quite dark Jen. I'd work on my spelling before attempting any more poetry.
2007-05-30 01:37:25 · answer #7 · answered by acesfourpal 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey,
Nice work!
Interesting piece...
Nice way you put the words sounds like your a very good writter.
Cassie xxx
2007-05-30 04:44:54 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good just needs a lil work at the end other wise i love it!!!!
2007-05-30 02:08:31 · answer #9 · answered by Princess_<3 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad I give it ***
2007-05-30 01:33:11 · answer #10 · answered by Nikki2 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋