A butterfly fluttered by
Swirled around, and landed on my thigh
I said to my little friend
"Get the f**k off me bug."
2007-05-29 06:48:12 · 9 answers · asked by ? 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
There should be a comma after bug. 'thanks, Buk. Man, you are one smart homeless guy.
2007-05-29 07:55:00 · update #1
On the last line, put a comma after "me". This will help clarify the bug as the object of your hatred.
Very, very nice poem.
Very nice.
2007-05-29 07:27:20 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think I'm looking at the future Poet Laureate*.
2007-05-29 09:52:46 · answer #2 · answered by Ajsansker 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A rare find in in today's world.
Interactive prose. Most excellent!
2007-05-29 07:00:20 · answer #3 · answered by Firespider 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like the part where you got high.
2007-05-29 07:35:01 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
did you take basketweaving in school? Thats damn good
2007-05-29 07:20:10 · answer #5 · answered by ? 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
that's some Wordsworth type stuff right there man!
2007-05-29 10:51:57 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
Pretty good.
2007-05-29 07:03:22 · answer #7 · answered by DJ 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
7 no... 8.... no.... 9. I am not sure.
2007-05-29 07:43:00 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
GOOD
2007-05-29 07:07:02 · answer #9 · answered by The Skinny PuP 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋