can u please ell me whatdo u think about these poems..and thank u
I want 2 know........
I want 2 know
If he loves me so...
I want 2 see
with him how's life gonna be...
I want 2 feel
If his love is real..
I want 2 hear
His words 2 me when he's near...
I want 2 be his
I want 2 be the one he'd miss...
I want 2 be next to him
coz life without him is so dim...
I want 2 be with him till the end
coz to me he's more than a friend...
.................................
YOU'RE THE ONE.....
you're the one 4 me
you're the clear one that i see
my love to u is greater than life
and sharper than a knife
there is nothing more i can do
more that to love you
you entered my heart & i locked u in
& locking u out would be my only sin
the day u entered my heart
is the day my life chose to start
this love is more than true
& it's alwayzz meant to be with u
& if u changed ur life to another way
deep in my heart u'll never ever get away
you're the 1 alwayz in my mind
2007-05-29 01:37:19 · 4 answers · asked by Nano 19 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
hey do u mind if i tookl them coz i really like them....i'll e-mail u
2007-05-29 05:18:35 · answer #1 · answered by Nano 19 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's a difference between rhyming lines and poetry. Poetry has imagery, meter, and many other meaningful devices. What you've written is a letter in a paragraph with short lines. These can not be considered poems.
2007-05-29 08:45:52 · answer #2 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 4⤊ 1⤋
It's a good start. If you enjoy writing...keep writing. Your writing style will change over time...reach deeper into your heart and soul :).
2007-05-29 09:15:06 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
For a start, you could change your "gonna" and "cuz" for real words.
2007-05-29 10:05:42 · answer #4 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋